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In Hell
Contributed by
Vermillion
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Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 01:42:30 PM in AEST
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In Hell
i am a young child 10 years old today i was never baptized i wasnt allowed to pray
so it was that i died cancer inside my mind there was no one at my bed side here i rest,here i die
i flew thru a tunnel a bright light i did see happiness caressed me and god i did see
he looked deep within me and said child your not saved can i still stay with you jesus? he said not today
so i was banished from heaven onward to hell sit next to satan and his pitchfork tail
burning and screaming demons gnashing of teeth twisting bones above my head lava below my feet
is this justifiable? a childs soul demise many are like me a thousands childrens cries
i curse the name of god life is so unfair death isnt any better trust me ive been there
suffering forever in hell eternity it does seem i awaken in my bed thank god,it was just a dream
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 01:43:39 PM AEST (User
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I am astounded. this is amazing
pixie xx |
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by brigitte7735 on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 02:30:22 PM AEST (User
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i missed you so much!! Been craving a little demented philosophy. soooo good
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadbloodyrose on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 02:31:14 PM AEST (User
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amazing and touching write.. very nice job...like always.. after i read your work i have to sit here for a moment and take a breath and think bout what i just read cuz its all so powerful.. everything you say jut hits me and it takes a moment to let it all soak in..your work is amazing.. AMI JO |
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by dreaded_Axe_of_gore on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 04:39:17 PM AEST (User
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Wow, Im at a loss for words here |
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by shorty_52 on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 04:32:04 PM AEST (User
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u've dun it again. great poem. great twist. great everything about the poem. keep it up
~allyson~ |
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by ArdRi79 on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:21:47 AM AEST (User
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Damn, that hits like a snipers bullet well written |
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadbloodyrose on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 07:00:41 PM AEST (User
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another great piece.. although i dont think ive read any of your work that wasnt.. nice job..and yes thank god it was just a dream.. take care.. AMI JO |
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Re: In Hell
(User Rating: 1 ) by assassinatorgirl on
Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 08:12:59 PM AEST (User
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wow, yeah, i really hope it is not the case that that is so, because a lot of really great people must be down in hell if it is. |
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