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Array ( [sid] => 54739 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => When you're invisible [time] => 2004-07-04 12:46:19 [hometext] => This is how I feel most of the time [bodytext] => You stare at the tanned skin of your arms
It looks real.
When you cut it
Blood seeps down it
In a mockery of your covered veins.
It must be real,
If it can bleed.
But to everyone else it is invisible.
They never see you,
Only ever see your carefully constructed pretence
That everything's just fine.
You're trying so hard to protect them
From what you are
That you have no strength left
To help yourself.
Sometimes you wonder that,
If you wrote a letter
And swallowed those tempting pills,
Would they see you?
Would your body become solid.
Real.
A reality in Death.
That should scare you,
But right now it sounds so good.
Your only restraint is self-control -
No-one is there to stop you
When you're invisible. [comments] => 5 [counter] => 208 [topic] => 32 [informant] => screamingfromwithin [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => SadPoetry )

When you're invisible

Contributed by screamingfromwithin on Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 12:46:19 PM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

You stare at the tanned skin of your arms
It looks real.
When you cut it
Blood seeps down it
In a mockery of your covered veins.
It must be real,
If it can bleed.
But to everyone else it is invisible.
They never see you,
Only ever see your carefully constructed pretence
That everything's just fine.
You're trying so hard to protect them
From what you are
That you have no strength left
To help yourself.
Sometimes you wonder that,
If you wrote a letter
And swallowed those tempting pills,
Would they see you?
Would your body become solid.
Real.
A reality in Death.
That should scare you,
But right now it sounds so good.
Your only restraint is self-control -
No-one is there to stop you
When you're invisible.

Copyright © screamingfromwithin ... [ 2004-07-04 12:46:19]
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Re: When you're invisible (User Rating: 1 )
by inseineangel on Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 01:01:34 PM AEST
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I found something in this that I understand. Something I can relate to and sympathize with. It is beautifully written.

Re: When you're invisible (User Rating: 1 )
by kammie on Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 01:14:20 PM AEST
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i can relate to this poem so much
but a pretense cant last for ever thats why i try to avoid my mother but lets not talk about that!
it was an excellent write i hope life gets better for you soon

love kammie xx

Re: When you're invisible (User Rating: 1 )
by Stoney1 on Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 01:25:02 PM AEST
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The way I see it is that you've got a bushel of lemons and you're
complaining about it instead of opening up a lemonade stand.

If you're regarded as being invisible to those around you, then
you're on the inside track for selection to the CIA's spy training school.

Ya see? A whole new career path has opened up to you! ,
Be happy!

"And what'll you have Mr....?" "Within...Screamingfrom Within,
and I'll have a martini, shaken not stirred."

Stoney

Re: When you're invisible (User Rating: 1 )
by screamingfromwithin on Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 07:57:31 AM AEST
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"And what'll you have Mr....?" "Within...Screamingfrom Within,
and I'll have a martini, shaken not stirred."

I like that It made me smile ......Thanks stoney

Re: When you're invisible (User Rating: 1 )
by CrimsonTears on Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 06:26:52 PM AEST
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I can really relate to this poem...your wrote it very beautifully...i like it alot...great job

Lots of Love
CrimsonTears

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