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[aid] => mick
[title] => Watercoloured Morning
[time] => 2004-07-14 23:21:20
[hometext] => Wrote this one winter morning when I awoke to that pleasant sound of rain against my window, and I stumbled out of bed to watch the water trickle down the glass.
[bodytext] => windowpane.
skitterish tapping.
a gently persistent, steadying shower
of grey winter spears.
steadily pooling
our soul-winter tears.
washing at walls.
resonance.
a gentle presence.
falling from heaven to cleanse us our sins.
return to the dirt
of the human race.
in kindness.
and
compassion.
fingers of ice
to cool our sorrows
to pull us back down to the place we began.
a gentle reminder of living the world.
gentle.
clean.
on the windowpane
a gentle rain.
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[informant] => wray
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[score] => 30
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
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[topicname] => NaturePoetry
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Watercoloured Morning
Contributed by
wray
on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 11:21:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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windowpane.
skitterish tapping.
a gently persistent, steadying shower
of grey winter spears.
steadily pooling
our soul-winter tears.
washing at walls.
resonance.
a gentle presence.
falling from heaven to cleanse us our sins.
return to the dirt
of the human race.
in kindness.
and
compassion.
fingers of ice
to cool our sorrows
to pull us back down to the place we began.
a gentle reminder of living the world.
gentle.
clean.
on the windowpane
a gentle rain.
Copyright ©
wray
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2004-07-14 23:21:20]
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by freespirit on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 12:57:48 AM AEST
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Well written I enjoyed reading this one
good job
God Bless freespirit |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 06:11:44 PM AEST
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| this is one of those truly great writes that captures everything, the emotion, the setting, I can see it, hear it, adn feeel it all as if I was there. Greatly done again wray. |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 01:31:38 PM AEST
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This is truly lovely. Very much my same feelings about rain. I love to stand in a warm summer shower feeling it cleanse my face. Excellent verse.
Rita |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by Archie on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:35:01 AM AEST
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| I agree with you God washes us clean when we ask him to. |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by katyqueen35 on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 11:33:41 PM AEST
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Hmmm very picture like poem...
I like it alot..good write....... |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by BrandySwanson on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 11:26:17 AM AEST
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good poem here and I'm very sorry if I made you feel depressed with my poem.
Brandy |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 12:55:53 PM AEST
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very pretty, great images:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by theMoth on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 02:17:00 PM AEST
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| I really like this--groovy.--the Moth |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by Gentledove on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 10:41:29 PM AEST
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a calming write.
Gentledove |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by blueheart on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 11:05:31 PM AEST
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Oh, wow, this is brilliant. I love the rain and you've described it so well.
The imagery so realistic and so alluring.
Beautiful write. :) |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by pvd on
Sunday, 25th July 2004 @ 07:49:19 AM AEST
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| Pleasent and soothing. |
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Re: Watercoloured Morning
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by Sagacious on
Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 10:19:37 AM AEST
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I can't tell you how much it irks me when weather forecasters (in New Mexico, no less) speak of incoming rain as though it be some kind of wickedness from on high, to be lived through and tolerated. Such days are my in-tune days, my seeing days, my all-around contentedly intuitive days, and I can't understand those who view them as an inconvenience or misfortune.
I love the way you describe the feeling of awakening to rain, first discovering the "skitterish tapping" of "grey winter spears," then allowing yourself to be entranced by that "gentle presence." And here is the kicker: falling from heaven to cleanse us our sins. / return to the dirt / of the human race. What better analogy for the cycle of depletion and renewal which fuels our planet? But the story doesn't end there. You hammer home your theme with geometrical perfection, as we are presented with fingers of ice / to cool our sorrows / to pull us back down to the place we began.
It's all about beginnings, and "Watercoloured Morning" transports me to a place where the passing of time is all but irrelevant. Thank you for helping me to re-capture my own memories of similar mornings, while looking forward to the next. Blissfully, -KAC- |
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