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The Storm
Contributed by
Luka
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Friday, 6th August 2004 @ 11:49:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The storm comes in Rises from within the dance of anger Has yet to begin It starts with emotion Building on pain Burning with rage Down pours the rain Pounding it's rhythm To the fire that burns A trail of destruction Your soul soon learns The ending comes quickly As the battle wears on The war has ended Your spirit is gone Destroyed by the storm Where anger is born Leaving your world Shattered and torn Broken pieces A life we cannot save Ending in sorrow from the torture hate gave
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Luka
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2004-08-06 23:49:32] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Storm
(User Rating: 1 ) by waos on
Saturday, 7th August 2004 @ 01:02:47 AM AEST (User
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thats good, i liked it, the way it rhymes how it flows and so on. its good. |
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Re: The Storm
(User Rating: 1 ) by TheSchroedmeister on
Saturday, 7th August 2004 @ 01:55:03 AM AEST (User
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Wow!
The rythym is absolutely killer in this piece, and the matching rhyme really adds to its overall grace. It's such an exciting piece to read...i had to read it a number of times to full appreciate it.
I look forward to more of your work
Great Great job |
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Re: The Storm
(User Rating: 1 ) by CrimsonTears on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 07:09:04 PM AEST (User
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i really like this...great write
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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