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[aid] => mick
[title] => For the rest of my life
[time] => 2004-08-13 05:00:43
[hometext] => Just a chorus I have been working on, it is very short
[bodytext] => For the rest of my life
through the darkness and light
I will walk close beside you
through my e're changing plight
though events should go wrong
I will still remain calm
If I did not have you
I would have nothing at all
(Nothing at all)3X
Repeat chorus
Nothings gonna e're change my love
It's stronger than the foundations of the earth
and when it's weakened you alone make me strong
with out you I could not go on
(Chorus)
(Added 8/14/04)(Ending)(Nothing at all-4X)
You are the one that brings the light into my darkness
You give me hope when my life seems to go astray
Prosperity comes from the lessons you have taught me
and brings rejoicing when I learn to trust and pray
[comments] => 9
[counter] => 218
[topic] => 34
[informant] => Archie
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SongLyrics
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For the rest of my life
Contributed by
Archie
on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 05:00:43 AM in AEST
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SongLyrics
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For the rest of my life
through the darkness and light
I will walk close beside you
through my e're changing plight
though events should go wrong
I will still remain calm
If I did not have you
I would have nothing at all
(Nothing at all)3X
Repeat chorus
Nothings gonna e're change my love
It's stronger than the foundations of the earth
and when it's weakened you alone make me strong
with out you I could not go on
(Chorus)
(Added 8/14/04)(Ending)(Nothing at all-4X)
You are the one that brings the light into my darkness
You give me hope when my life seems to go astray
Prosperity comes from the lessons you have taught me
and brings rejoicing when I learn to trust and pray
Copyright ©
Archie
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2004-08-13 05:00:43]
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by venkat on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 05:35:14 AM AEST
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Short but it has a strong foundation..
actually such a beautiful rhyme is expected to have few more stanzas to satisfy a reader like me..Ahh..let it be..its a beautiful one. venkat |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 05:43:55 AM AEST
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I don't think its that short. I mean, if played slowly on accoustic guitar, it could probably go for around two minutes.
I really like this song, Archie, and can only find one thing about it that I'd change; It would be 'can' in the last line to 'could', as you are changing tense, and I found that this seems to work better for me, at any rate.
Thinking of a melody, I am . . . |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 10:22:05 AM AEST
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| Hi Archie. I would love to hear the finished song. This is a beautiful start. Rita |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by linagalMBfan01 on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 10:44:21 AM AEST
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this is a great start to a beautiful song i'm sure.
i would love to hear the finished piece. great write.
lina |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 01:18:12 PM AEST
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Archie really fantastic piece cant wait to read it all.
Awaiting with baited breath
Brill
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 01:49:46 PM AEST
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This could go either way, as a stand alone or as a part of a longer song. I keep a folder when I don't think I'm quite done with an idea or a start, and return periodically to it. Sometimes the fragments just end up melding themselves and I didn't notice for months untill I pull them back out and realize they had been waiting to be put together in the right order. But I too belive the "can" should be could. A nice write !
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 12:10:42 PM AEST
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Excellent!!!! Great job..... You are so talented.. I do hope your dreams come true....soon.. so that I will be able to hear your beautiful songs...
(Can--->could)
Jenni |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 01:14:19 AM AEST
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I would truly like to hear this song. I'm thinking of a simple, acoustic style, with perhaps an instrumental interlude to lengthen it. Excellent piece.
Andrew |
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Re: For the rest of my life
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by Lee on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 06:50:48 AM AEST
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Poet at Industrial Colosseums Unbound
Says:
Very crisp.
Like a good bowl of cereal.
"Rest Of My Life"
"Am I the only one that feels alone
Though, all is home
Emotions flow
Am I the only one that hears the tears run down my face
Would anybody recognize at all
[Chorus:]
Cause I know
I'm so slow
But I'm trying
And I'm still dying to know
Say you won't leave for the rest of my (life)
Life's the only thing that deals the pain
Like pouring rain
Breeding hate
And I don't wanna do no wrong
My God, it's been so long
Please comfort me
Before I go insane
[Chorus] "
-Unwritten Law "Rest of My Life"
You have a distinct poetic voice.
Jolly Good Show!
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