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[aid] => mick
[title] => Shadow Whispers
[time] => 2004-08-17 02:18:09
[hometext] => *** It seems a little simple on the page, but, I don't hear it that way in my head... in my mind, it's really... more than that, I guess ***
[bodytext] => “I’m scared”, she whispered
But no one was there
Except a shadow
Who edged closer
Until it brushed against her
“I’m lonely”, she whispered
Into the empty room
Past the shadow
Who seemed to listen
And maybe even understand
“I’m confused”, she whispered
This time speaking
To the shadow
Who held her hand
As tightly as a shadow can
“I know”, whispered Shadow
In a quiet voice
And she thought
That maybe he meant it
And he cried because he did
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[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
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Shadow Whispers
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Silent-No-More
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Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 02:18:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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“I’m scared”, she whispered
But no one was there
Except a shadow
Who edged closer
Until it brushed against her
“I’m lonely”, she whispered
Into the empty room
Past the shadow
Who seemed to listen
And maybe even understand
“I’m confused”, she whispered
This time speaking
To the shadow
Who held her hand
As tightly as a shadow can
“I know”, whispered Shadow
In a quiet voice
And she thought
That maybe he meant it
And he cried because he did
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 02:49:51 AM AEST
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| this iz beautiful, u have much talent. i love it. z the shadow meant 2 represent any one? |
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 08:14:29 AM AEST
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Interesting read. A little unnerving, probably the imagery rather than the subject matter. The best comfort in the darkness of despair are empathetic ghosts? Why not! Good write.
Spike |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 08:44:17 AM AEST
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Oh, SNM . . . for, eh, reasons mentioned previously, this may join Roxbury Falls and Wings (Part II) in my favorites of your poetry.
This one sort of hurts to read . . . I've read it about three times and it doesn't get any easier. Still trying . . .
many hugs,
Nora |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:09:40 AM AEST
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The struggle is hard the fight is long, May you have the strength to endure, and the will to overcome.
The poem was am eye opener, to the struggle, the emotions were vivid and heart felt.
It was Beautifully written.
Take Care
KinDragon |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by darkplaidbabe on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:22:11 AM AEST
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i can relate to this, its sad ina comforting way (if that can possibly make sense to anyone) beautiful poem. always a pleasure,
lovelovelove, Brynna |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 10:01:10 AM AEST
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awesome write SNM,
Pixie xx |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Eve on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 10:19:43 AM AEST
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You're right, it isn't quite as elaborate on paper as it is in the mind. But the paper surely only doesn't have enough depth to support it well. The concept's got me, holding my mind "as tightly as a shadow can".
Beautiful.
Keep writing,
-Eve. |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 10:22:17 AM AEST
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I love love loved this - and don't think od it as simple at all - but your language is concise - so perhaps that is why you see it so-
You project so well, and I love the last lines
“I know”, whispered Shadow
In a quiet voice
And she thought
That maybe he meant it
And he cried because he did
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 02:02:10 PM AEST
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Simple words, written down on paper that evoke elaborate mental images. It is very hard to completely convey the depth of the things we see in our heads, paper being two dimensional. However, as those words are lifted and float into my mind, they begin to formulate "shadows " of the things you see. And my shadow weeps with yours. Excellent write.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 02:46:25 PM AEST
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Shadows are, as much as they can possibly be, very comforting. They are where I expose my deepest emotions when I can't do it publicly. They do comfort and caress you in a way, and I think, being shadows, they do "know" and understand the darkness. I understand this well, SNM. You have done an excellent job here of conveying your thoughts.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 01:43:00 PM AEST
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I think all of us have felt this way at one time. You may not remember the time or the place, but the feeling is remembered well. I remember it.
You have brought tears to my eyes and all I can say is..."I know." |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by theMoth on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 08:48:19 PM AEST
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| Wowie zowie, this is different. Reminds me in a way of the "pilgrim shadow" in Poe's Eldorado who spoke to the knight. Or maybe the shadow is Pazuzu... Only the Shadow knows... Cool write. Groovy.--the Moth |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by pvd on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 06:55:18 AM AEST
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Interesting read. You take me to places within my own self.
PVD |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Stitch on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 10:01:26 AM AEST
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Did you mean "he" or "she" in the last line?
I mean the second pronoun. I'm curious because I read it the other way. This is a very effective and sadly sweet write.
Stitch |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 03:51:51 PM AEST
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A very powerful ending to a wonderfully powerfull poem. Keep up the good work.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Shadow Whispers
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 03:45:32 AM AEST
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Your absolute brilliance shines in this one. I find myself wanting to read it again and again....and I am.
Really awesome!
Timber
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