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My Psychotic Mind
Contributed by
CrimsonTears
on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 11:11:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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Climb into my psychotic mind
Look around what will you find
Lost in a room filled with blood
All of a sudden it begins to flood
Up to your neck in crimson red
Inside my mind you think youre dead
You close your eyes, shaking with fright
Open your eyes and there is no more light
Lost in this pitch black repression
Cant find your way out of my dark depression
Now youre stuck in my mind forever more
Youll feel such pain never felt before
On your knees you pray for sweet death
Just take that last wondrous breath
Oh no my friend that will not take place
Youll stay there stuck in my dark space
Ill make you suffer, feel my pain
Feel all my sadness and disdain
Inside my mind youll never die
Feel every single tear that I cry
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CrimsonTears
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2004-10-15 23:11:03]
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by Gimpie on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 11:33:48 PM AEST
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| This is an absolute awesome poem. psychotic yes, but wonderfully written. Good Job. |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 11:37:23 PM AEST
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| excellent write. well written and intriguing. i liked your last stanza the best because of the power in it. |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by gt on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 11:53:50 PM AEST
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| Great poem, really deep. I think the rhythm is broken too often, but other than that fantastic |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 12:34:17 AM AEST
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| I've often felt that way about my own head before. Great write. |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by MomentInTime on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 01:34:10 AM AEST
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Let me into your mind and I may find something altogether different.
Great write
Jordan :o) |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 02:54:59 AM AEST
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| rythem and flow, a deep poem, with alot of emotion and clear images, so cool to read, soundz like a mind to complement mine, cheers for sharing such a cool talent to mezmerize. |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by inoc on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 03:14:11 AM AEST
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I thought it was brilliant
cheers!~ |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 04:44:50 AM AEST
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| I really enjoyed reading that, it's an awesome write...I think it would be even cooler if it were made into a song :) |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by EVERxSOxSWEET on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 06:18:32 PM AEST
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| Very emotional and deep. I felt your pain on that one. Excellent Work. |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by ALineAboveTheStepBeneath on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 02:34:14 PM AEST
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| Very nicely done. |
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Re: My Psychotic Mind
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by assassinatorgirl on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 04:08:05 PM AEST
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| beautiful...i never knew someone felt the same way as i did. great job! |
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