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Racing With Steeds
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 12:57:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I want to be like one of those who race With bolting steeds across the night-black air With flaming torches like unfastened hair Aflutter in the stormwind of their chase.
Opening lines of The Boy by Rainer Maria Rilke, as translated by Walter Arndt in The Best of Rilke
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I suppose you would say that Mr. Rilke Wrote in the wrong language (because its not yours and you cant understand it - and) Because you simply havent bothered To do the due diligence that is necessary To grasp the wisdom of his words
And I would guess that you dont like Pictures drawn in black crayon (because your eyes havent adjusted to the dark and) Because youve never seen a black rainbow And havent bothered to consider that, in any color, A rainbow is always a beautiful thing.
And I suspect that you think only white pearls Should be hung around ones neck (because youve never worn a strand of black - and) Because you dont realize that youre being choked By the pretty necklace that someone bought for you Were it black, it would at least be ironic.
And I see you rapt by the nightingales song Disturbed by the raven that chased her off (because you fear the raven for no real reason - and) Because you dont like the song hes singing Even when he's trying to tell you something That you really need to hear.
But I prefer Rilke to Frost And black crayon to yellow The black pearl to the white And the raven to the nightingale
(because I think I understand them - and) Because I, too, abhor sameness and expectation
And tonight As gentle breeze gusts to gale I draw a bit closer to those steeds.
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 01:05:59 AM AEST (User
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Great piece of work! Write on! Much peace. |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 01:07:03 AM AEST (User
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*reads it*
*rereads it*
*rereads it again*
*is in poetic euphoria now*
This is as good as it gets, on all the different levels possible. I'm awed and feel a little different, just for having read it. This won't be the last time I return to this page to read it.
Wonderful, truly amazing job, hon.
huggy bouquets,
Nora |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 01:21:25 AM AEST (User
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Nice! I actually wanted to get a Wilke book the other day at the book store but it was too expensive. *weeps* Reading this only makes me want to get that book even more. |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 02:02:10 AM AEST (User
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awesome poem, unusual but not in a bad way, cool to read painting clear pictures, an enjoyable read. |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Hurretje on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 02:04:25 AM AEST (User
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Wonderful work that really grabbed me... A pleasure to read.
Do you know I've been at Rilke's grave in Raron, Swiss?
It is really strange to be there, because it's such a small graveyard...
Hugs,
Hur |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 09:56:24 AM AEST (User
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I think it's all been said for me wow!
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 10:48:19 AM AEST (User
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great write, i enjoyed,
pixie xx |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Nazmythian on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 11:06:15 AM AEST (User
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And I would think no finer words are likely to cross my path
This day or any other in those that are soon to come
( because they have been issued by a worthy sister of the cause - and )
Because superficial sameness still runs rampant
The collective fails miserably at creative comprehension
And understanding demands independant thought
With arms spead wide and a standing invitation, I beckon to SNM ... " Come, race the wind with me ... "
And to hurrretje ~ ( who said )
"Do you know I've been at Rilke's grave in Raron, Swiss?
It is really strange to be there, because it's such a small graveyard... "
Dammit !! I don't do green well but I am wearing it after that statement !!! I'm jealous !!!
Nazmythian ~
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by theMoth on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 03:28:23 PM AEST (User
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Hmmmm.... Besides Naz,
I still don't think most of the people who commented on this really get the point.
Yes, it is well written,
but the message is the
most appreciable part.
That is why my series
The Poetic Avenger
uses so much imagery and
characters.
Maybe if they see the Clones of poetry
as disgusting, pathetic, and
even evil they will finally understand
what is wrong not just with poetry,
but with the whole world.
It's the mediocrity of
the unimaginative,
their insecurity,
cliqueishness,
and pro-conformist
poetic fascism
that must be destroyed.
--Mothy |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 03:57:37 PM AEST (User
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I'm trying to remember who showed you those black rainbows - I can't remember if it was V.S. or ShadowDaughter .. . marvellous they were, and you've used their power and impression to maximum effect here.
Poetic avengers all should read this. |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 08:44:11 AM AEST (User
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I'm not familiar with Rilke, but this intrigues me. Do, tell me more. Well written and well said.
Stitch |
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Re: Racing With Steeds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
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So, okay, yeah, you say you can't draw good but wow....this was like reading (seeing) a work of art. Very vivid and very astonishing. Amazed at how you describe things through your artwork....er, um, poetry. ;-)
Timbo
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