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Array ( [sid] => 71819 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => the transfer [time] => 2004-11-16 17:17:42 [hometext] => [bodytext] => the first bullet grazed his thigh
the second buried itself in his lungs
he was losing air
so i held his head in my arms
and i repeated to his cold face:

‘you’ll be fine, you’ll be alright’

the truth was:
he didn’t have long

i took my knife and dug it into his chest
until his body went limp
goodbye, old friend

i relieved his suffering
and now carry enough for both of us
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the transfer

Contributed by summers on Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 05:17:42 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

the first bullet grazed his thigh
the second buried itself in his lungs
he was losing air
so i held his head in my arms
and i repeated to his cold face:

‘you’ll be fine, you’ll be alright’

the truth was:
he didn’t have long

i took my knife and dug it into his chest
until his body went limp
goodbye, old friend

i relieved his suffering
and now carry enough for both of us

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Re: the transfer (User Rating: 1 )
by neglected1 on Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 07:03:37 PM AEST
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So very sad.. it almost brought tears to my eye.. in how i know what loosing a friend feels like.. but its almost harder to see them suffer..
you dont see too many topics like this
but i really enjoyed reading your piece..
it was short but very well written

~neglected1~

Re: the transfer (User Rating: 1 )
by amatt on Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 08:45:28 PM AEST
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wow....i like it...it was just idk it was very cool ive never seen one written about something like this

Re: the transfer (User Rating: 1 )
by fielding88 on Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 12:28:53 PM AEST
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this poem touched on such an obscure topic..and it really made u feel what it means to lose a friend in one of the hardest ways. I just hope it never happens to me, I have to be really grateful for that, and hope this poem gets to others in the same way.

Re: the transfer (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 26th January 2005 @ 08:15:42 PM AEST
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This one was really sad. Blessings.

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