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Final goodbyes
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 12:47:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I walked to the edge of the cliff this morning,
Just to scream to the wind, a final goodbye,
And as the wind took my hair, I got lost in dreaming,
And I knew if I jumped, there would be no more lies...
(There would be nothing to lose if I died...)
And the thought almost swirled within me,
A breath of freedom from lifes dreary ways,
And maybe if I jumped I wouldn't fall...but I would fly away.
I'd be able to get away from this mess within me,
Watching from afar, but feeling no pain.
And maybe it would be better for all, if I could drift away...
And there would be nothing left to mourn for,
No pain in my glazed over eyes,
As my body lay broken, below a frozen heaven,
With no more breath left to cry,
No more voice to utter sad goodbyes.
(No more people could leave my side)
This would be my final goodbye..
And I just wanted someone to save me...
But maybe it's too late to be saved....
But standing upon the cliff top,
I knew I couldn't throw my life away.
Not today...
(So...for now I'll just walk away....)
(And maybe tomorrow I can live my life again)
(I hope...)
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lostinmyself
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2004-11-22 12:47:06]
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by pixie on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 12:49:47 PM AEST
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awww Phil, I have never read anything so sad in all my time on here, it is written so beautiful that it makes it even more sadder, so powerful very deep, *hugs you lots*
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by lifefliesby on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 03:45:54 PM AEST
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"awsome" write dude, in every sense of the word.
it's amazing.
I don't know if it's just me and you or more or even everyone but I think everyone feels this sometime.
and if not, they should, so they can learn to appertiate life that much more.
you seem like a good person(I'd call ya a kid but I don't want you to be older than me, lol)
keep it up man
try to love to live... and live to love
peace man,
Jared |
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by Stitch on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:20:38 PM AEST
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You know, I see this as a step forward, really.
The fact that you walked away from the cliff. I don't know. I'm not Rita, so I'm not expert, but I very much feel you are moving toward something. People who give up don't struggle the way you have and continue to do. I feel very strongly that you are headed toward positive things, but, well, we all spend some time in the trench. Yup, that's easier to say once you're out, but I spent nearly 5 years there, and I'm not just spouting rubbish. Praying for you, friend.
Your poetry continues to improve in depth and form. Watch you contractions.
Love,
Stitch |
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 04:21:01 PM AEST
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And if you left??!!! Another bright light extinguished!
I for one am glad you walked away, as they say...where there is life, there is hope...Phil you have it in you to be a brighter light then you already are in this world...keep it burning!!! |
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 03:44:23 AM AEST
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There is a lot of beauty to this piece. A lot of Life, even though it is heavy with sadness. I hope times will turn soon, and give your hopes what they deserve.
Blessings.
Andrew |
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 09:24:40 PM AEST
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Awesome write.... That's the spirit!!
Jenni |
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by little_genna on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 02:43:51 PM AEST
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*hugs you*
Such a beautiful poem, even with its content.
I felt like i was stood in your place on the cliff.
This is so sad and im incredible glad you did walk away.
*hugs you tighter*
This poem is definitely a step forward,
Though it may feel like a step backwards in the future.
You seem like a strong person,
You will get through this,
*hugs you again*
Take care Phil.
Love
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 05:00:12 PM AEST
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great message, beautifully written, and remember, the world needs your voice:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Final goodbyes
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 10:10:30 PM AEST
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| this was another brilliant piece, but for some reason the ending left me dissatisfied. as i tell a lot of people around here, an ending can make a masterpiece or ruin one. |
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