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[aid] => mick
[title] => Unwanted
[time] => 2004-12-03 03:49:12
[hometext] => I didn't really think about this, it just came out, which is why it's rough. I didn't know if Sad poetry, Angry poetry or About YPDC was more appropriate. (Oh and it's not about love...)
[bodytext] => I fight so hard to say how I feel, but always keep it locked inside,
And sometimes I feel so dead in here, I wonder if I'm still alive,
I am nothing but a hollow space, filled with words trying to escape,
Until one day I know I'll burst, and scream them all away.
(And then my heart burst today)
Because your words are like sharp needles, probing inside my heart,
And some of the things you say to me are tearing me apart,
And I thought that there was more to this, It is not meant to work this way,
I didn't think your words to me, could cause this much dismay.
I've always tried to speak to you, like I wish you would speak to me,
No insults hurled at you from afar, no harsh words to hear or see,
But respect doesn't mean the same thing anymore, or you never knew what it means,
And you beat me, hurt me, verbally, then turn around and leave.
And you kick me when I'm already down, and don't care about how it hurts,
I fight for peace every day, and still wonder if it is worth the work,
And the words will not fall onto the paper, but the tears still escape from my eyes,
And every single heartbeat is accompanied by the familiar sigh.
But you don't care about how you hurt me, you just care about yourself,
And I know I've become selfish, but I'm lost inside myself,
And I just want someone to notice, just ask if I'm okay,
Because to me it feels like nobody cares, that I'm still around today.
I'm sorry if I ask too much,
But I just want someone to say...
'I understand and I care'
*******
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 326
[topic] => 32
[informant] => lostinmyself
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 24
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SadPoetry
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Unwanted
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 03:49:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I fight so hard to say how I feel, but always keep it locked inside,
And sometimes I feel so dead in here, I wonder if I'm still alive,
I am nothing but a hollow space, filled with words trying to escape,
Until one day I know I'll burst, and scream them all away.
(And then my heart burst today)
Because your words are like sharp needles, probing inside my heart,
And some of the things you say to me are tearing me apart,
And I thought that there was more to this, It is not meant to work this way,
I didn't think your words to me, could cause this much dismay.
I've always tried to speak to you, like I wish you would speak to me,
No insults hurled at you from afar, no harsh words to hear or see,
But respect doesn't mean the same thing anymore, or you never knew what it means,
And you beat me, hurt me, verbally, then turn around and leave.
And you kick me when I'm already down, and don't care about how it hurts,
I fight for peace every day, and still wonder if it is worth the work,
And the words will not fall onto the paper, but the tears still escape from my eyes,
And every single heartbeat is accompanied by the familiar sigh.
But you don't care about how you hurt me, you just care about yourself,
And I know I've become selfish, but I'm lost inside myself,
And I just want someone to notice, just ask if I'm okay,
Because to me it feels like nobody cares, that I'm still around today.
I'm sorry if I ask too much,
But I just want someone to say...
'I understand and I care'
*******
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
... [
2004-12-03 03:49:12]
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Re: Unwanted
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by savedbydeath on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 04:10:35 AM AEST
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aww!its ok i'm sure theres more then just me that understands and definitly more ppl then just i care,i just got out of a relationship of a very long time,and he was only caring about his self,i didnt think that was fare,it got me really confused bc he always said that i only care/think about myself,but u know what,ur aloud to care about urself,we all r,to be honest,for most chicks it takes awhile to start to care about someone especially if our hearts have been broken before,so dont worry about being depressed bc of 1 person,i really liked this poem and obviously i can definitly relate,thumbs up high!!
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Re: Unwanted
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by veenu on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 04:14:22 AM AEST
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i just respect the feelings,,,,,,,..........in ur words
ilike the most is
but u dont care.....................................................................................................around today
well ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,something i too noticed in love is that who did not care are not in love with u
awesome.................but needing a little bit modifications............dont think like that its not good s need to modify its great mind it |
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by musicisluv7 on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 05:38:27 AM AEST
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| awwww i care abt u so dnt fil unloved. gr8 write! much luv |
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Re: Unwanted
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by pixie on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 05:47:02 AM AEST
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*hugs* awww hun I CARE I am always here for you , to talk to, rant with/at, give you advice etc etc...this poem is the saddest you have written, it is powerful and your hurt is very prominant in your mind, I care about you a great deal I am just so sorry that you feel like this, *pulls funny face to make you smile*
love and cuddles
pix xxx |
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Re: Unwanted
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by Stitch on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 06:12:40 AM AEST
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This is a good write, and I guess it pretty much explains how what's going on makes you feel. I really love this site, but change is inevitable. It's too bad people get hurt in the process, but I do believe even THAT happens for a reason. Rambling.
You keep writing, Lost.
Stitch |
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 08:23:21 AM AEST
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| I can relate to this alot. Great job spilling your feelings on a sheet of paper. This is awesome. If they don't care, they don't deserve you either, there are people who do. |
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Re: Unwanted
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:11:11 PM AEST
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I have a feeling that you know there are those out there that understand and care. I bet you have more arms than you could count , that would offer up a hug at a moments notice. Your feelings show throughout this write. I think you did well.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Unwanted
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 05:06:01 PM AEST
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Well done Phil, such a shame we tend to write our best when hurting.
I'm going to add my hug to the rest, you are a sensitive, caring person and those that don't see that are not. |
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Re: Unwanted
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by emystar on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 03:32:13 AM AEST
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Oh me I know that feeling or have known it.
Hang tuff my friend 'cause joy cometh in the morning.
Guess u can tell I'm trying to do some catching up.
Hang in there.
luv, huggs, faith, hope, joy, peace,
emy |
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Re: Unwanted
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by only4das on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 11:07:32 AM AEST
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| I think you're a great poet/writer...all your poems are beautifully written |
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Re: Unwanted
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by allforyou on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 12:40:07 AM AEST
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This one put tears in my eyes. You described your pain so rainlessly and I feel the same as you do (I think). Always remember when things feel at their worst, there is always hope. Maybe you were blessed with a caring family, friends, or some other type of comfort. I don' t know you so I couldn't really say which it is, but there is comfort for everyone somewhere so if you think you are alone, and that no one cares, you are wrong.
An ear when you need one,
--Kara |
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Re: Unwanted
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by Necromant on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 03:15:37 AM AEST
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*Takes some time to think clearly* Whoa! This poem is so filled with hurt and pain that it took me few blinks to get myself back. So sad!!!!! This poem is so great! It radiates the emotions so strongly! Ahhh you're a great poet! Keep it up! I loved this one too!
Anne :) |
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Re: Unwanted
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by Cathy on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 09:53:59 AM AEST
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| Wow I really like this poem it very deep You are a wonderful writer I enjoy reading your poems an i want to let you know that i care about you and i relate to some of that so yeah |
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