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The stranger behind the mirror
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 11:21:46 AM in AEST
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Staring at the walls and listening to the echoed sighs,
Screaming back the answers to all the questions I despise,
Silently wondering, if the answers come from inside,
And hiding all these feelings, behind a nod, and a smile.
And no matter what I try to do, i cannot admit the truth,
I don't know how to say these things, not to me, and not to you,
But everytime I see the mirror, I know that things are still the same,
And I know i cannot deny myself, anymore this way.
And I'm lying only to myself to wash away the pain,
And no matter what I try to do, my reflection stays the same,
That infuriating smile, and eyes that don't quite hide the pain,
And just cause the hate of myself to come back once again.
But i will carry on this way, the same as I do everyday,
And maybe when tomorrow comes, things may have changed,
But if they don't, then at least I'll still have the smile in place,
Again...
(And I ask no one: Will the stranger behind the mirror, ever go away?
As i smile....)
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by pixie on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 11:25:03 AM AEST
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bloody hell that was deep to say the least, this is like all your poems written through and immense feeling of pain and lonliness, I feel the hurt and struggle you are going through, I am always here for you whenever you need me ok hun? *hugs*
pixie xx
a very good write, you do have a way of expressing your feelings to make the reader stop and read over and over |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Vampyre_BloodWraith on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 12:49:36 PM AEST
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When I look in the mirror there isnt anything looking back at me...sometimes I feel this way...but that is only sometimes.
awesome poem they capturing the feeling with well chosen words...such a high quality write....a masterpiece from a master of words. |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by autumngreeneyes on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 03:20:47 PM AEST
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| I wish I had something to say..not that the poem isn't good..it's just that I don't know what to say..I'm at a loss ya know? |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by UnlovedChild on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 04:22:08 PM AEST
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| Wow, strong and emotional . Kinda like what you see past the mirror. |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 04:24:22 PM AEST
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Phil, I think we have to grow into loving ourselves. As we age we tend to quit expecting perfection, forgive ourselves for our mistakes, and learn to live comfortably inside our own skin. We finally quit trying to please the world and make ours to our liking. We, as our true honest selves, are an asset to this universe, or our spirit would not have been put on this earth. Self-love is the hardest one to learn, but you will know it eventually. Hopefully soon, sweetie.
Much love,
Rita
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Sunday, 12th December 2004 @ 08:11:25 PM AEST
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deep, awesome, well done!!!!
2 sum it up:
WOW |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 08:19:46 AM AEST
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I would lower case the I on "if" in the third line.
Otherwise, you've got a powerful and stellar write here. I know I keep saying this over and over, but your writes have grown increasingly more introspective, and each one outshines the last. So very impressive.
Stitch |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 04:51:00 AM AEST
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Very poetic. I think that if you take Stitch's advice, then you're going to have to assess which I or i it is you're referring to in regards your duality, in reflection. If you do this, then it would give this write exceptional depth.
I recommend it - kudos to Stitch for the pointer on that.
Keep writing, Phil. |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 04:53:10 AM AEST
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Oh yeah - I meant to add;
You should consider every instance of I and i in this poem. PM me if you're confused and i'll try an example. |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 07:28:07 AM AEST
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Lovely write - You captured this intangible feeling so well, that I think we all can relate to the emotion.
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by katyqueen35 on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 07:13:07 AM AEST
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aww phil i can like feel your words.
I can really relate to what your saying.
Anytime you need to talk either email me or pm me. ok kiddo. love ya hugs |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 09:09:59 AM AEST
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Very powerful and reflective, no pun intended. The imagery of the mirror is masterful. Poem seems to relate to who am I in the sense of what you're willing to reveal. The issue of transparency
A beautiful and thought provoking poem. I can feel the emotions, especially the pain
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 07:25:10 PM AEST
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The pain is certainly there, but you make the right choice to keep on going, hoping things will fall into place someday. It may be a long wait, but I do believe things will come right for you in time. Hope itself helps us. Hope and struggle is a better way to live than hopelessness without the struggle.
Blessings, my friend.
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 04:55:46 PM AEST
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I can't begin to say how much this poem affected me.... I feel so much like I wrote this... except that I wouldn't have said it so eloquently.... Thank you for sharing this....
Jenni |
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Re: The stranger behind the mirror
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by Bleeding_Nightmares on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 10:53:02 AM AEST
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| I look in the mirror yet nothing looks back, at least you have a shadow, deep poem with an excllent flow. |
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