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[sid] => 76555
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => It's Huge
[time] => 2004-12-20 06:31:54
[hometext] => ~*Just happened to glance at something that provoked a series of thoughts in me. Instantaneously inspiring me to write. I suppose I owe the inspiration in part to Stitch's 'Naivete.' A far cry from my writer's block*~
[bodytext] => The first snow of the year
Cascading, pristine, untouched
Upon the vast valley of wooded splendor
Your arms around me, so warm and so tender
My heart I surrender, it's bound in your clutch
But the snow doesn't stick
Melts almost quicker than it alights
The fragile innocence evanescing and it's gone
All that's left is cold, like listlessness left in the shadow of a yawn
And disappointment, frustration at ruining a treasure so slight
It's huge
A big deal
I'm aware and I'm earnest
I'm upset and sincere
Yet suppressed by some unknown force
My spirits oppressed by some kind of what? Fear?
I've given few grievances, hardly any protest
But...
Well...
So maybe you don't know
So I'm telling you now
I'm aware and I'm earnest
I'm upset and sincere
The snowfall was important
That first one of the year
And you need to know
That I cherish that snow
And it is a big deal...
It's huge
It upsets me
Now you help me to heal
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 251
[topic] => 6
[informant] => liquidsunshine
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 38
[ratings] => 8
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => AngryPoetry
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It's Huge
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 06:31:54 AM in AEST
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AngryPoetry
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The first snow of the year
Cascading, pristine, untouched
Upon the vast valley of wooded splendor
Your arms around me, so warm and so tender
My heart I surrender, it's bound in your clutch
But the snow doesn't stick
Melts almost quicker than it alights
The fragile innocence evanescing and it's gone
All that's left is cold, like listlessness left in the shadow of a yawn
And disappointment, frustration at ruining a treasure so slight
It's huge
A big deal
I'm aware and I'm earnest
I'm upset and sincere
Yet suppressed by some unknown force
My spirits oppressed by some kind of what? Fear?
I've given few grievances, hardly any protest
But...
Well...
So maybe you don't know
So I'm telling you now
I'm aware and I'm earnest
I'm upset and sincere
The snowfall was important
That first one of the year
And you need to know
That I cherish that snow
And it is a big deal...
It's huge
It upsets me
Now you help me to heal
Copyright ©
liquidsunshine
... [
2004-12-20 06:31:54]
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Re: It's Huge
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 08:25:56 AM AEST
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I miss the snow too, Hun. It's important to me too.
*hugs you tons*
This is very good, you managed to get how you feel onto the page very well.
Great write hun. I can understand.
*hugs*
Phil xxx
(Hey what's going on with comments? Doesn't anyone do it anymore? lol)
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Re: It's Huge
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 08:37:40 AM AEST
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Ohh that was kind of sad, very poetically written. Great job.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: It's Huge
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by MMISS on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 09:13:32 AM AEST
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| this touched my heart! it's so full of real feelings and i think you deserve five stars for this poem! |
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by pixie on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 11:51:32 AM AEST
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great writing *hugs*
pixie xx |
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Re: It's Huge
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by liquidsunshine on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 04:03:46 PM AEST
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You know, it's amazing how the snowfall aligns so well with other pristine situations in my life. I just want to remind everyone that most of my poetry has a double-meaning. This is most definitely one of them.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
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Re: It's Huge
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 06:37:40 PM AEST
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Ohhhhhhhhhhhhh Chels! Way to work a metaphor, girl!
If this is what I think it is - you are absolutely, totally, completely right - it IS a huge big deal. And heck - even if it isn't what I'm thinking, you're probably still right. There just is nothing worse than acting like some important thing is no big deal. You know, they might not get it --- if they don't hon... keep saying this over and over and over until they do!
Wonderfully written, my Anita poo! Very, very seriously - I'm quite impressed with this piece, AND with the thinking behind it. Yeah you!
Big 'ole Whoddathunket hugs to you!
~SNM~ |
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Re: It's Huge
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 26th December 2004 @ 11:15:09 AM AEST
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Heehee.
Oh Chels, I'm so sorry I missed everything behind this. (Must have been asleep that day. lol.)
^_~
*hugs you tons and tons*
Phil xxx
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Re: It's Huge
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by eatfresh22 on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 06:20:29 PM AEST
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Being that this poem was quite sad, I thought it interesting that it was categorized under Angry Poetry. I guess you're like me in the sense that the things which makes us so irrate are also the things which cause the deepest depression. I hope that he/she/they realize what a big deal is and how it should be dealt with. Hopefully Sensitivity will break into your life and overwhelm you. I love you, Chelsea.
~Carrie~ |
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by waos on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 05:25:48 PM AEST
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snow is an inspiring thing, i really enjoyed this write, though you
did a wonderful job indeed. it is wonderful how things like snow
can totally just "inspire" and break through a writer's block.
nice job
~waos/kara |
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Re: It's Huge
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by Tricky on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 01:37:34 PM AEST
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| umm.......a lot of big words i don't understand, but it's good none-the-less. ttyl |
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