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[aid] => mick
[title] => Dead of Night
[time] => 2005-01-03 20:06:28
[hometext] => My first attempt at Haiku
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Images of fear
Unknown terror darkness holds
My eyes never close
~~
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Dead of Night
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 08:06:28 PM in AEST
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Images of fear
Unknown terror darkness holds
My eyes never close
~~
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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2005-01-03 20:06:28]
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Re: Dead of Night
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by TaintedSoul on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 08:12:41 PM AEST
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I tend to have trouble with strict forms myself and haiku tend to leave one desperately counting their fingers as they conjure images through words. Great first attempt at one! Nightmare or night terror ... perhaps even life itself comes to mind.
peace
TS |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Whitelightning77 on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 08:13:12 PM AEST
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wahoo - haiku!
I like these types betters where it's written in the 5-7-5 rather than jsut 17 sylables.
thanks for sharing
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Re: Dead of Night
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by EverlastingDawn on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 08:23:46 PM AEST
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| Good starting hiaku. It's always difficult to write with boundries, especially such limiting ones. And yet you show nice imagery, in only 17 syllables. Nice write, congratz |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by autumngreeneyes on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 09:28:55 PM AEST
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| I better not comment..I tend to write strict Japanese form and .. this is not according to form.. nature..first line showing what season..all that..and I said I wasn't going to comment..but then you didn't say what kind of haiku you were attempting.. Americans!! I didn't even know you'd been on..wearing your cloak of invisability again? LOL .. |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 05:18:07 AM AEST
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oohhh very good, bravo!!!!
pixie xx |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by arden on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 10:44:16 AM AEST
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you are a brave one nazzy, i wont even attempt a Haiku lol
wonderfully done, i liked it.
:)
Becky |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 11:45:17 AM AEST
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Naz,
I don't know anything about Haiku, so I won't comment on that. But what does impress me is your willingness to try new things, to bridge new boundaries.
Willofree |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 07:31:55 PM AEST
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excellent haiku:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 07:18:14 PM AEST
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Don't laugh, but I'm picturing a white faced clown lying dead in his bed staring straight at the ceiling.
Stitch
(who told you not to laugh) |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th January 2005 @ 09:38:17 AM AEST
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I am always amazed at how well done Haiku can express so much with so little.
You have achieved that here my friend.
Great job!!! |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 6th January 2005 @ 09:54:38 PM AEST
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| excellent haiku. lots of meaning. |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 07:53:05 AM AEST
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*giggles at Stitchy's comment*
Well done hun. Definatly excellent for a first time.
*hugs* Phil xxx
(Who sucks at Haiku poetry) |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by FleurdeSang on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 06:59:57 PM AEST
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................Speechless.....................
My brain is dead. Nothing is coming up. All that's blinking is:
MASTERPIECE!!!!!!!!!!!
More when words are suitable. Love this. Thanks so much for sharing. Chéri, vous ne manquez jamais d'impressionner et attirer. Forever,
Fleur de Sang~
(Haiku attempt, wonderful cheri!) |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by wray on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 08:11:05 AM AEST
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| A few descriptions come to mind when I read this: hard-hitting, horrifying, gripping. The punchline is... very punchy lol. Nice one :) |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 01:00:37 PM AEST
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Well i like it.its got a haunting feeling to it.
I think you did will lol.and by the way i am back. :P KQ |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 06:22:19 PM AEST
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Nice work! I admire haiku, but don't naturally express myself in it. It's one of those danish things. Ah, never mind... inside lingo.
Keep it up. And watch out for the clowns.
Andrew |
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Re: Dead of Night
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th January 2009 @ 05:52:12 PM AEST
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Yup, I'm afraid of the dark, too. Scary stuff. Uh, the poem and the dark.
Nice job.
Take care,
Tim |
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