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Array ( [sid] => 79077 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Submerged [time] => 2005-01-08 20:37:31 [hometext] => *please comment* [bodytext] => Despretly I gasp for breath,
I see the bubbles rising,
Is this what I want?
Do I want to end it here? Like this?
Thoughts run through my mind endlessly,
I think of many things.
My friends, family, and lovers,
The day to day life I live.
I'm getting weaker now,
Almost no longer breathing.
Then in that moment,
I think of what I'm yet to experience,
Marriage, birth......
So many things that I'm not promised yet everyone takes forgranted.
I forget my sorrows, my wonders, my worries,
The water overtakes me with my final breath........ [comments] => 6 [counter] => 172 [topic] => 13 [informant] => Apolla [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 4 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )
Submerged

Contributed by Apolla on Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:37:31 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry



Despretly I gasp for breath,
I see the bubbles rising,
Is this what I want?
Do I want to end it here? Like this?
Thoughts run through my mind endlessly,
I think of many things.
My friends, family, and lovers,
The day to day life I live.
I'm getting weaker now,
Almost no longer breathing.
Then in that moment,
I think of what I'm yet to experience,
Marriage, birth......
So many things that I'm not promised yet everyone takes forgranted.
I forget my sorrows, my wonders, my worries,
The water overtakes me with my final breath........




Copyright © Apolla ... [ 2005-01-08 20:37:31]
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Re: Submerged (User Rating: 1 )
by afterdark on Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:38:43 PM AEST
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I think if you do try it..Go for pills or something a bit better..Drowning is such a damn downer hun.


Re: Submerged (User Rating: 1 )
by breny on Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:41:40 PM AEST
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i think you realized a little to late that commiting suicide is stupid without experiencing everything life has to give. good poem though


Re: Submerged (User Rating: 1 )
by Artemis03 on Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:45:28 PM AEST
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Very creative..very cool. Something new that expresses the"you". I like it...
It kinda gets a girl thinkin'.lol. It's all true..
I quiver with fear...jk Artemis2Apolla ^_^


Re: Submerged (User Rating: 1 )
by ViktorMorgan on Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 09:19:34 PM AEST
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Very expressive, tantalizing ending. Expresses alot of emotion


Re: Submerged (User Rating: 1 )
by THUGGIN4REAL on Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 03:25:43 PM AEST
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i like your poem , and it doesnt matter if people can relate or not , what matters is that your words come from your heart. nicely done


Re: Submerged (User Rating: 1 )
by Whisper on Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 11:03:26 PM AEST
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Ahh nice vision words. Excellent choice of words. The reader can almost swallow the bubbles slipping across their lips. Nice write.

Whisper




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