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[aid] => mick
[title] => losing her reality
[time] => 2005-01-17 05:55:07
[hometext] => only just wrote this not sure where it came from but comments are welcome.....
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Breathe the toxic fumes.
Watch as it consumes,
A once pure child,
Now she has turned wild.
Evil and conceited,
All her friends badly treated.
They don’t see her, for who she is,
She is a nasty little miss.
Sweet and innocent, I think not,
She has a devious plot.
Losing her grip,
Watching the rope rip,
She’s twisted and deadly,
Still not sure how this could be?
Worlds apart from you,
If only you could see through,
Her fakeness…
SJ
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[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
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losing her reality
Contributed by
little_genna
on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 05:55:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Breathe the toxic fumes.
Watch as it consumes,
A once pure child,
Now she has turned wild.
Evil and conceited,
All her friends badly treated.
They don’t see her, for who she is,
She is a nasty little miss.
Sweet and innocent, I think not,
She has a devious plot.
Losing her grip,
Watching the rope rip,
She’s twisted and deadly,
Still not sure how this could be?
Worlds apart from you,
If only you could see through,
Her fakeness…
SJ
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Re: losing her reality
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 09:17:36 AM AEST
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| "Evil and conceited",reminds me of my teenage years,good write. |
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Re: losing her reality
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by wolfman on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 12:49:22 PM AEST
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she has had thigs happen to her that she doesnt want to talk about and that is what has taken her this way she doesnt want it to but to fight it she must revile stuff about herself that even she doesnt want to know let alone others her fakeness is her shiled some timse it works and other times it dosnt it will get easer when she makes peace with herself and lets others know the true her.
this was an odly good poem I dont like it but I dont not like it ( probably the structure and that its unfinished but I dont know) the fack that you didnt finish it leave alot to the imagination (sorry but thios is how i read it.) which entices readers to want to know more about her . (do tell) please post again.
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Re: losing her reality
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 03:57:23 PM AEST
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| i wonder how bad it is under all that fakeness, if it is better or worse. you wrote this very well. |
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Re: losing her reality
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 05:56:54 PM AEST
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She's trying to hide her own insecurities...
Great write. |
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Re: losing her reality
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 04:39:35 AM AEST
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| Awesome poem!!! Do not know really what else to say, but a truly awesome poem! |
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Re: losing her reality
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 05:41:51 AM AEST
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Very good writing.
Don't know what kindda toxic fumes she was breathing but this is a masterpeice.
It's sad tho.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: losing her reality
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 09:55:17 AM AEST
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i read both of these reality poems very insightful and powerful i will be reading more of your poems ur a right 2 the point tell it like it is writter,i'm in 4 some good reading . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: losing her reality
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by Mangs on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 09:14:45 AM AEST
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Reality is that which, when you stop believing in it, doesn't go away.
Love always,
Umang.
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Re: losing her reality
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by gmcse8 on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 10:43:59 AM AEST
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WAS THIS SELF ASSESMENT? PRETTY HARSH MIRROR YOUR LOOKING IN IF IT IS. OR MAYBE IT IS JUST A REQUEST FOR SOMEONE TO SEE PAST ALL THAT ARMOR.
BOB. |
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Re: losing her reality
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by gmcse8 on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 11:05:46 AM AEST
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WAS THIS SELF ASSESMENT? PRETTY HARSH MIRROR YOUR LOOKING IN IF IT IS. OR MAYBE IT IS JUST A REQUEST FOR SOMEONE TO SEE PAST ALL THAT ARMOR.
BOB. |
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