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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Countdown
[time] => 2005-02-14 19:34:10
[hometext] => Award-Winner~just won the Valentine's Competition at Poet's Palette! (And won without images.) This is an improved draft with images, debuting on YPDC.
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This capsule scarred with a thousand fractures
is coming home to die with a crash,
do you think the stars are crying?
In your sleep, a thousand starfish
crawl thru the wreckage,
can you imagine them whispering?
A ghostly echo of your name
sets my spirit free to attempt the impossible,
but will you still hear me?
I'm coming home to rest my cloudy head
down upon the misty shores of your dreams...
do you hear me singing?
I stole songs from the glowing stars,
and symphonies from the deepest black holes...
did you hear me being chased by the screaming comets?
I'm almost there to sing them all to you...
to shower you in glittering stardust and silvery moonbeams...
can't you almost hear me at the door?
do you hear me falling,
feel me burning in your arms,
and breaking up
into a thousand pieces,
nine-hundred and nintey-nine pieces...
nine-hundred and ninety-eight...
the final splashdown commences...
swallowed by a thousand cold waves,
I will keep these love songs here forever,
I am here waiting for you to come to me,
I stole the secret day and hour of your arrival...
the hundreds of moons,
the number of revolutions around the sun...
do you hear me
counting down?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Poets Palette
This version copyright 2005
debuted on your-poetry.com February 14, 2005
Original written December 24, 2004
first appeared January 1, 2005 on An Ocean Full of Soul
[comments] => 16
[counter] => 309
[topic] => 2
[informant] => the_Ghost_Moth
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[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
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[score] => 115
[ratings] => 23
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
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The Countdown
Contributed by
the_Ghost_Moth
on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 07:34:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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This capsule scarred with a thousand fractures
is coming home to die with a crash,
do you think the stars are crying?
In your sleep, a thousand starfish
crawl thru the wreckage,
can you imagine them whispering?
A ghostly echo of your name
sets my spirit free to attempt the impossible,
but will you still hear me?
I'm coming home to rest my cloudy head
down upon the misty shores of your dreams...
do you hear me singing?
I stole songs from the glowing stars,
and symphonies from the deepest black holes...
did you hear me being chased by the screaming comets?
I'm almost there to sing them all to you...
to shower you in glittering stardust and silvery moonbeams...
can't you almost hear me at the door?
do you hear me falling,
feel me burning in your arms,
and breaking up
into a thousand pieces,
nine-hundred and nintey-nine pieces...
nine-hundred and ninety-eight...
the final splashdown commences...
swallowed by a thousand cold waves,
I will keep these love songs here forever,
I am here waiting for you to come to me,
I stole the secret day and hour of your arrival...
the hundreds of moons,
the number of revolutions around the sun...
do you hear me
counting down?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Poets Palette
This version copyright 2005
debuted on your-poetry.com February 14, 2005
Original written December 24, 2004
first appeared January 1, 2005 on An Ocean Full of Soul
Copyright ©
the_Ghost_Moth
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2005-02-14 19:34:10]
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Re: The Countdown
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by Stalkee on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 07:39:10 PM AEST
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| that was awesome and absolutely beautiful...*re-reads* I enjoyed every single line of this... |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 04:02:41 AM AEST
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I can see why it won awards - its as strong a write as I've seen; compelling and visually irradiant.
I suppose I should start writing real poems again, in order to remind myself what I am.
Thanks for the inspirational kick in the ass, ghost. |
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Re: The Countdown
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 05:49:49 AM AEST
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A very compelling write, you’ve done well with this Ghosty and no wonder you got an award this was really something. Great write and I hope to see more of it.
Jane xxx |
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Re: The Countdown
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 06:56:42 AM AEST
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well done Mothy, that was amazing :)
pix xx |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Rxqueen on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 04:26:23 PM AEST
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| That is absolutely beautiful Ghosty! You definately deserved that award. You are extremely talented! This was such a refreshing and amazing peice. I really love it. It seriously gave me chills. Yet another of yours I will have to print out and save. Wonderful! Every single word of it, wonderful. XOXOXOXO |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 06:53:12 PM AEST
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WOW!!!! Awsome job! You blew me away with this!
There is something diffrent in this.......a bit more of the real you???? |
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Re: The Countdown
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 11:30:08 PM AEST
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Oh wow Mothy, this write is soooo amazing...seriously...You have written so many masterpieces, and really, I'm not just being nice, I'm serious...You are up in the ranks of the greats...Excellent, amazing, fantastic, and all the other words that I have yet to come up with...*applauds*
Mason |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 07:29:37 PM AEST
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On the Award ... congratulations !!! Well deserved ... I hope many more follow.
On the words ... I hung on every one, you twist a new direction every time your pen is put to page ... every time I think I know what you can or will do ... you prove me wrong. I love it.
On the art ... I tried to read just the words and not see the images there on the screen ... I couldn't. I believe they add substantially to an already fabulous piece.
Nazzy ~
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Re: The Countdown
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by freckle on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 08:18:22 PM AEST
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Ghosty this was remarkable. I loved it! The words, the phrases...you did an excellent job....then again, I am the last of many to sing your praise already on this post! Waiting for more, as always!
Carol |
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Re: The Countdown
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 05:08:54 PM AEST
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This is amazing mothy...A thousand words
would never be enough to describe this.
I love the ending...Great job. |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 11:20:03 PM AEST
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| your voice is powerful and unique. I always appreciate the experience. It is an inspiration to the rest of us who are trapped in ordinary |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 11:24:47 PM AEST
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Like always i find your work amazing and entertaining.lol
you deserve an award.
Orders Jane to give mothy a lap dance.heheheh |
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Re: The Countdown
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 11th March 2005 @ 09:02:41 PM AEST
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this is truely breathtakingly beautiful, mothy, pics didnt come up for me but im sure they are great too, the poem itself is exquisite, whatever your feeding your muses keep at it:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: The Countdown
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by nintool3369 on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 02:10:38 PM AEST
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there's a reason why you got an award on this one...
great imagery here...thought the ***** world was going to die reading it! haha i love that *****! |
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Re: The Countdown
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 05:34:43 PM AEST
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| wow---I think mjgrl5 said it best. Your poems are awe-inspiring... |
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Re: The Countdown
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by Archie on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 06:56:36 AM AEST
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| Great originality and style. I think this is one of your better writes. |
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