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Array ( [sid] => 87134 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => murder [time] => 2005-03-10 21:21:44 [hometext] => sorry is so long, but please comment [bodytext] => he barged in the room
a young woman sleeps
soundlessly
unawakened

he crashed into the desk
she stirs
and awakens
she screams at the sight

he told her,
its the last time you'll scream
shes frozen
cant move or speak

he gets off the floor
and lifts the gun to her head
another crash
it distracts him

she takes the gun
as another walks in
begging him not to hurt her
he saw the love in his eyes

he pulled out another gun
and shoots him
shes mad
and fires the gun
over and over

she races to his side
and crys
she needs him
she loves him

he said things
that needed to be said
and drifted away
she continues to cry

she begs him to come back
says i love you
and took the gun to her head
and pulled the trigger

they were both buried
side by side
under the willow tree

the priest said at the funeral
they loved each other so much
one couldnt deal w/out the other
i hope their together now... [comments] => 2 [counter] => 205 [topic] => 36 [informant] => visualizing_life [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 4 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Suicide )

murder

Contributed by visualizing_life on Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 09:21:44 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

he barged in the room
a young woman sleeps
soundlessly
unawakened

he crashed into the desk
she stirs
and awakens
she screams at the sight

he told her,
its the last time you'll scream
shes frozen
cant move or speak

he gets off the floor
and lifts the gun to her head
another crash
it distracts him

she takes the gun
as another walks in
begging him not to hurt her
he saw the love in his eyes

he pulled out another gun
and shoots him
shes mad
and fires the gun
over and over

she races to his side
and crys
she needs him
she loves him

he said things
that needed to be said
and drifted away
she continues to cry

she begs him to come back
says i love you
and took the gun to her head
and pulled the trigger

they were both buried
side by side
under the willow tree

the priest said at the funeral
they loved each other so much
one couldnt deal w/out the other
i hope their together now...

Copyright © visualizing_life ... [ 2005-03-10 21:21:44]
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Re: murder (User Rating: 1 )
by high_on_duct_tape on Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 09:36:27 PM AEST
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interesting... good. i hope this is not a true story

Re: murder (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 09:52:52 PM AEST
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a little choppy, but otherwise really good. reminds me of a song...anywho, nice job.

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