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One Dream
Contributed by
scottmunster
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Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 04:07:12 AM in AEST
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Too Short, not enough time.
One Dream, now she's on my mind.
It just hit me out of the blue
But I'm not fooled that this love is true.
I've been cheated once before,
By destiny's false lore.
I threw to much away
and now it's gone, always to stay.
But this one dream, with one kiss.
Has it been there all along. What did I miss?
Or is it simply a trick, played by my mind.
A simple illusion that passes with time.
Well whatever it is, she's on my mind.
Copyright ©
scottmunster
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2005-03-28 04:07:12]
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Re: One Dream
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 04:12:37 AM AEST
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Well, I'm awful glad I was online when you dropped your first post. If this is an introduction to what you will be offering up in the future... I'll be dropping by your page on occasion.
I love the last line here. It occurs to me that I really ought to learn to let it be whatever it is and stop spending so much time wondering exactly what that is! lol
Welcome to YPDC, Scott - I hope you'll be posting more-
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Re: One Dream
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by Nos_Bunny on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 04:46:29 AM AEST
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| Thats pretty good, just a few spelling mistakes but I don't think anyone will bother, I liked the little touch at the end of how you ended the poem without its effect |
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Re: One Dream
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by Sinned on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 07:28:27 AM AEST
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Scottmunster
Nicely written as for spelling you may use the editor button on the screen to correct, do that often. You have a good sence of words andI too hope you keep posting. I like your writes--:)
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Re: One Dream
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by SocialMisfit on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 02:02:18 AM AEST
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very very good my friend im not saprised at all tho i knew you had it in you.
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