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[sid] => 92995
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Suicide
[time] => 2005-05-01 23:46:29
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => The pain, registering into my vein
As I tried to strain the razor
Into the wrist, making a stain
down below of blooded blist
Feeling, as I became
self damaged, of the proclaimed
Slicing through the skin of timid
morbid flames
Cutting down so deep,
Brought me down to sleep
While the blood came out and seeped
When my life was slowly reaped
While the pounding of my heart slowly
went down, my lifeless body was drowned
in a pool of blood, as it scudded down in a flood
As I took my last breath, Knowing well of my
future death, I had died, taking all the hatred inside
While people still denied, my self inner pride
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 447
[topic] => 72
[informant] => justingunshin
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => self-harmpoetry
)
Suicide
Contributed by
justingunshin
on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 11:46:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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The pain, registering into my vein
As I tried to strain the razor
Into the wrist, making a stain
down below of blooded blist
Feeling, as I became
self damaged, of the proclaimed
Slicing through the skin of timid
morbid flames
Cutting down so deep,
Brought me down to sleep
While the blood came out and seeped
When my life was slowly reaped
While the pounding of my heart slowly
went down, my lifeless body was drowned
in a pool of blood, as it scudded down in a flood
As I took my last breath, Knowing well of my
future death, I had died, taking all the hatred inside
While people still denied, my self inner pride
Copyright ©
justingunshin
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2005-05-01 23:46:29]
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Re: Suicide
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 11:52:16 PM AEST
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Justin?
I hope this is only in writing and not what you really going to do?Because i will be heart broken and just die if anything happened to you.this poem really made me sad it brought tears to my eyes.I love you and don't you ever ever hurt or kill yourself.I love you so much.
If you need to talk let me know.
Hugs
love mom |
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Re: Suicide
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by Justingunshin on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 11:52:27 PM AEST
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| I meant scudded not scudding, oops |
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Re: Suicide
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 10:41:06 AM AEST
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there are people who care deeply about you. you have such talent and greatness in you... never give it away, never give it up. it would be nothing but tragedy and remorse if you ever did something...
if you EVER need to talk, you can pm me anytime and i will reply as quickly as possible.
luv n hugs,
jennie* |
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Re: Suicide
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by Kie-Kie on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 02:06:14 PM AEST
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Wow Justin...I do hope this was just a poem
I know what that feels like, please don't go down that road... no one should put more pain on themselves...
great poem...
Love ya,
~Kiela~
(who really hopes you'll choose life) |
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Re: Suicide
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by paul_x_walker on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 04:30:27 PM AEST
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great poem justin
good job
dont kill your self
now ok |
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Re: Suicide
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by saved_by_the_x on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 02:18:35 PM AEST
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| i have went down that road but it has been 84 days seens i last did it plz if you need anythiing email me ant jennkkgirl@yahoo.com cause what i have went throught no one should have to go through i do not know you but i love you plz do not do what your poem is explaing and if you have i will be praying ypu want do it any more i am "living" proof that you can make it like i told you email me if you want to talk love ya ~kk~ |
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Re: Suicide
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by spazz911 on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 03:07:39 PM AEST
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this is realllllllllly good poem, i hope u wont do that, but idk wat ur going through if u need to talk
well good write
kc |
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Re: Suicide
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by SylviaWalters on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 10:42:11 PM AEST
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This is a very touching poem, but as much as I like it, suicide is a permanant solution to a temporary problem. I used to attemp suicide, but never had enough mental strength to suceed. I now only cut for the pain. It's not *fixed* but I'm slowly cutting down. Hope you get through this ok.
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Re: Suicide
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by sweetestsin101 on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 12:29:53 AM AEST
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i feel for you dude. i have cuts on my arm, i know that feeling. but, i also knew that there are people out there that care about u. thats wut got me 2 stop. peace, be careful, *gives uberly big hug even tho the dude dont even kno me* god bless
~*~Lexi~*~ |
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Re: Suicide
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by DreamPoetess on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:23:07 AM AEST
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Well now, who is the lucky one, here I am to read, an avid reader of poetry, not a good writer, oh yes, I love to read:>
The speaker of this poem is saying this to me:> that the character is actually bleeding backwards, not forward. Why do I believe this? Oh because the speaker has poor blood, and it must go back instead of forth. Mankind has had bad blood since the beginning of dusts creation. Yes! Does the speaker want to die to the evil world? Does the speaker really know the means of what suicide is? No of course not, but the speaker does have fear, the fear of ridding its character because of faults, and who's fault is it?
The speaker shows its blame, it lacks the responsibilty of life intended, and readily, any intelligent person can see, it is not from the perfect one. There was one perfect man sent down to us. He who took more pain than we will ever understand, and yet, we deny it, with razors? Men and women of this earth, get real, it was we who demanded the cross to be posted in the very dust we are made of:>
Meagan writes:>
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So I say over and over, I shall not wake up until the one who comes for me is good, and then I will arise from my sleep:> |
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