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Array ( [sid] => 95529 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Bait [time] => 2005-05-23 20:54:49 [hometext] => It dangles but do the fish bite? [bodytext] => With the nets in the water
I would catch my prize
but that is no longer
the river basin dries

Dangling my bait
off the edge of the hook
my casts come up empty
intentions I mistook

The hunger it comes
for a catch tonite
but darkness seeps in
extinguish the bright

The night sky is clear
and the fish they do swim
falling over while looking
my knees I do skim

There's a whole world of life
seething under the sea
I cannot breathe water
it isn't for me

So hunger I must
while I gulp down more air
My bait goes unnoticed
I don't belong there [comments] => 5 [counter] => 154 [topic] => 16 [informant] => jaycee [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 4 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => FriendshipPoetry )

Bait

Contributed by jaycee on Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 08:54:49 PM in AEST
Topic: FriendshipPoetry

With the nets in the water
I would catch my prize
but that is no longer
the river basin dries

Dangling my bait
off the edge of the hook
my casts come up empty
intentions I mistook

The hunger it comes
for a catch tonite
but darkness seeps in
extinguish the bright

The night sky is clear
and the fish they do swim
falling over while looking
my knees I do skim

There's a whole world of life
seething under the sea
I cannot breathe water
it isn't for me

So hunger I must
while I gulp down more air
My bait goes unnoticed
I don't belong there

Copyright © jaycee ... [ 2005-05-23 20:54:49]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Bait (User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 08:58:59 PM AEST
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Maybe you do belong there. Maybe you are just using the wrong bait? This is an interesting poem. Actually, I love to fish and it caught my eye. As in everything, tastes do change occasionally.

Rita

Re: Bait (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:01:21 PM AEST
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I love the analogy you used here....and Rita is sooo right!!! Please reconsider...it may not be unnoticed as you think....
Hugs
Crazy

Re: Bait (User Rating: 1 )
by blue_angel on Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:43:47 PM AEST
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r u hungry? go eat sum of them chocolatey rich brownies n get back up on yer feet jaycee! dont give up, listen to these ppl things will get better, if i have to promise u i do rite now. i promise things will get better. u'll see. just give it time.
jennie*

Re: Bait (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:55:55 PM AEST
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I often feel like writing poetry is like fishing. I usually have one or two lines and when I start writing, the rest sorta reels in.
Aside from that, it's a cute poem. don't leave.
J.

Re: Bait (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 10:26:14 PM AEST
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Jaycee

Great poem and very well written , however i hope you dont leave as you are a talented writer and a friend!!!

Leia

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