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Array ( [sid] => 9577 [catid] => 1 [aid] => Mick [title] => So shoot me [time] => 2003-01-01 12:30:00 [hometext] => [bodytext] => Within' the shadows of the moon I've seen
still cannot understand why she was so mean,

I wish it was raining and could hide the tears
that the whole experience would just disappear,

Alas the demander thing is over and it is reined
so just shoot me now as I am filled with distain,

Predetermined outcome from the very eye
that secretly openingly covertly wants me to cry,

Anything may happen who could really know
somebody shoot me please I dont feel welcome here.

Yeah I hate the colour red
makes me wish that I was dead
all from something someone said
awwwwww go on, aim for my head...

[comments] => 5 [counter] => 252 [topic] => 13 [informant] => ladyfawn [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 13 [ratings] => 3 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

So shoot me

Contributed by ladyfawn on Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 12:30:00 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

Within' the shadows of the moon I've seen
still cannot understand why she was so mean,

I wish it was raining and could hide the tears
that the whole experience would just disappear,

Alas the demander thing is over and it is reined
so just shoot me now as I am filled with distain,

Predetermined outcome from the very eye
that secretly openingly covertly wants me to cry,

Anything may happen who could really know
somebody shoot me please I dont feel welcome here.

Yeah I hate the colour red
makes me wish that I was dead
all from something someone said
awwwwww go on, aim for my head...

Copyright © ladyfawn ... [ 2003-01-01 12:30:00]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: So shoot me (User Rating: 1 )
by darkmind on Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 03:07:47 PM AEST
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i wish a lot of stuff would go away to sounds like how i always am good poem

Re: So shoot me (User Rating: 1 )
by Mystery_Girl on Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 03:19:46 PM AEST
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Sounds like alot of hurt in this poem...i hope this get better for u soon.........take care.....Tanya.....

Re: So shoot me (User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 06:28:59 PM AEST
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I liked this poem a lot Vanessa. You put a lot of feeling and heartache into this. The line, 'I wish it was raining and could hide the tears' really struck me because I've felt like that a lot. Great poem! I hope it wasn't anything I said that made u feel that way.

Bobo (Joel)

Re: So shoot me (User Rating: 1 )
by Fwog on Thursday, 2nd January 2003 @ 08:29:52 AM AEST
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Nessa, Nessa, Nessa.
How sad,
BUT IT WOULD HAVE TO BE OVER MY DEAD BODY:
Cause I have just met you and I like YA!
Ciao

Re: So shoot me (User Rating: 1 )
by Cynthia on Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 08:38:44 PM AEST
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Nessa, this is such a dark write. It's very sad how a person could treat you this way. *Hugs* *S* Cynthia

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