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Array ( [sid] => 96097 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Perfectly Incomplete [time] => 2005-05-28 20:04:01 [hometext] => I wrote this poem about my two best friends and me and how we've been through so much together. Our experiences really are the glue between us [bodytext] => Walking down the halls, what do you see?
A pack of girls, a line of three.
So pretty are they, so perfect and whole,
Let’s listen to their gossip told,
'I’m promised to be married!’
'Oh really? Me too!'
Of their worries and troubles, no one but they have a clue.
Gaping wounds upon their hearts,
Each girl’s wound guarded, letters and photo have long since been burned at the fire’s hearth.
'Denial, that’s what we’ll do,'
'We’ll forget these things and be happy soon.'
But they cannot forget the wrongs done unto them,
So hot and fiery were their spirits then.
Innocent and pure as they appear now,
Memories which a cause return not to be allowed.
'I’ve never been so happy before!'
Their lives seem as grand as princesses in mythical lore,
Skirts, hair-dos, and shoes,
Expensive and beautiful is how we want to look too.
'Has he ever done that to you?'
A scrap of the past, the other two stare aghast,
'Don’t you ask that of her!'
The defense rises, the comment curbed,
'I’m sorry, never again will it be heard.'
Many tears have been cried,
Ripped blood has been shed,
All three have at one point wished to be dead.
But they are so full of life and joy,
Look at them walk down the hall, attracting the gaze of every boy.
So perfect are they, so pretty and true,
'Studmuffin…'
'Hmm?'
'I love you.'
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Perfectly Incomplete

Contributed by Kitty06 on Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 08:04:01 PM in AEST
Topic: FriendshipPoetry

Walking down the halls, what do you see?
A pack of girls, a line of three.
So pretty are they, so perfect and whole,
Let’s listen to their gossip told,
'I’m promised to be married!’
'Oh really? Me too!'
Of their worries and troubles, no one but they have a clue.
Gaping wounds upon their hearts,
Each girl’s wound guarded, letters and photo have long since been burned at the fire’s hearth.
'Denial, that’s what we’ll do,'
'We’ll forget these things and be happy soon.'
But they cannot forget the wrongs done unto them,
So hot and fiery were their spirits then.
Innocent and pure as they appear now,
Memories which a cause return not to be allowed.
'I’ve never been so happy before!'
Their lives seem as grand as princesses in mythical lore,
Skirts, hair-dos, and shoes,
Expensive and beautiful is how we want to look too.
'Has he ever done that to you?'
A scrap of the past, the other two stare aghast,
'Don’t you ask that of her!'
The defense rises, the comment curbed,
'I’m sorry, never again will it be heard.'
Many tears have been cried,
Ripped blood has been shed,
All three have at one point wished to be dead.
But they are so full of life and joy,
Look at them walk down the hall, attracting the gaze of every boy.
So perfect are they, so pretty and true,
'Studmuffin…'
'Hmm?'
'I love you.'

Copyright Â© Kitty06 ... [ 2005-05-28 20:04:01]
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Re: Perfectly Incomplete (User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 08:56:32 PM AEST
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It is good you have your friends. Yes, working through life's problems can be a great bonding experience.

Rita

Re: Perfectly Incomplete (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 08:58:41 PM AEST
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Well that glue seems to made a good writier out of u.
Great write.
huggs,
emy

Re: Perfectly Incomplete (User Rating: 1 )
by wizard on Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 01:35:15 AM AEST
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a perfect tale of the bonds that friends share.
i like this one alot.

PMC

Re: Perfectly Incomplete (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 07:25:42 PM AEST
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beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa

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Re: Perfectly Incomplete (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 10:05:03 AM AEST
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What I find interesting here is the allusion to at least two of them having a shared experience of someone else and yet none of them ever talking to each other about it. the friendship is beautiful, but makes me wonder how much deeper it would be if they could open up and share the pain as well. But anyhow, it's a great poem. Good job! J.

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