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[title] => Wet Dreams
[time] => 2005-05-31 19:21:19
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[bodytext] => Wet Dreams
A tear drop falls
To be buried in its grave.
It was nothing at all,
But it took my breath away.
Nothing but sadness takes
Everything in its wake.
Her dream stricken eyes
Are wet with the tears
Shadowed in lies
Of her forgotten fears.
Everything but happiness takes
All of her dreams away,
Yet she still cries for the lies
That only procreate
The sadness instilled in her eyes
For she knows her dreams will never be
Anything but taken away.
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Wet Dreams
Contributed by
Essentially9
on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:21:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Wet Dreams
A tear drop falls
To be buried in its grave.
It was nothing at all,
But it took my breath away.
Nothing but sadness takes
Everything in its wake.
Her dream stricken eyes
Are wet with the tears
Shadowed in lies
Of her forgotten fears.
Everything but happiness takes
All of her dreams away,
Yet she still cries for the lies
That only procreate
The sadness instilled in her eyes
For she knows her dreams will never be
Anything but taken away.
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Essentially9
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2005-05-31 19:21:19]
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:29:20 PM AEST
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| Well done Jen, but that wasn't surprising...! You really expressed yourself well with this write. Scorp. |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:31:20 PM AEST
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your expression and emotion are always so powerful in these writes I felt this sadness
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:33:05 PM AEST
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I expected something a little different
as the title would lead me to believe..lol
but a beautiful and sad piece of writing nonetheless
Billy |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:39:37 PM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
The title is a nice attention getter and that's a good thing.
luv, huggs,
emy
Hope u feel better soon. |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:49:29 PM AEST
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:) the title is somewhat deceiving!
nevertheless...i thought this piece deserved some credit...
An emotive write
Well done |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by ruthy on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:50:50 PM AEST
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| well done darling, thats a fantastic poem! ....felt the same before...continue the good work never give up the dream....~Ruthy~xXx |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 08:06:21 PM AEST
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| This was a very good expressive poem, but dang how do you get more then six comments lol, I have been trying so hard to get more then five lol, anyway this was a good poem. SLipSiX. |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 08:28:47 PM AEST
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**Stares at the sky**
Jen...instead of sounding like a broken record, I will just leave you to figure out what I think of this.
~Clark |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by waos on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 08:36:31 PM AEST
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This title definitely mislead me, and the only reason I opened up this poem was
because you were the author. However, it wasn't what I wondered it might be,
it turned out amazing! This was one of my favorite poems I've read. All of it
was awesome, I can't really say anything other than that. :) Nice job!
~Kara |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 09:02:37 PM AEST
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| Another masterful flow |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 10:02:36 PM AEST
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I like the form and technique of this poem. It has a sad theme of dreams not coming to be; but the wording and imagery are great.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 02:07:54 AM AEST
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Why you naughty monkey LOL. I thought you wrote something provocative like a "Wet Dream". Non-the less I enjoyed this write. It was very honest like all of your poems it's you.
J xx
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 10:31:24 AM AEST
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This realy touched me, the feelings churned
inside me as i read it ,yeh tell me about
dreams that don't come true, and how u
never get over it, beautiful write as always . . .
Benedetto John Papa Sr.
aka. Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 06:47:37 AM AEST
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Ironic how lies are often more comforting than the truth.
Well done Jenn. |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by seriphsoul on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 11:16:02 PM AEST
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| This is sad, but very well written, I liked the diction a lot. |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 08:53:29 AM AEST
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Beautiful once again I especially like the first stanza, and the last. Wonderful write.
--amanda-- |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 08:03:35 AM AEST
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Your dreams are yours and no one can take them away from you. Stay positive and keep those dreams close to your heart.
Brilliant write
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Wet Dreams
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by Sinned on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 10:43:51 AM AEST
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Excelcent
Sinned
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