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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Dash
[time] => 2005-06-12 10:11:45
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[bodytext] => When we are born, a line appears
Unseen by eyes but felt thru years
We grow fast to slow when old
The granite waits when we feel cold
But in between our births and deaths
We succumb to trials and tests
Some lift high and half are chance
Days flit by without a glance
Decisions made where future's lie
Choosing wrong, then making right
Youth know all 'fore wisdom sees
What we sow becomes our deeds
And if you ask someone who's old
What's important? You'll be told
To live and love, laugh and play
For no one knows when it's their day
To fall asleep and not awake
For life is short with no retakes
And right below your given name
They'll be a dash between the dates
[comments] => 19
[counter] => 525
[topic] => 43
[informant] => kie
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[score] => 34
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => oops
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The Dash
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kie
on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 10:11:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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When we are born, a line appears
Unseen by eyes but felt thru years
We grow fast to slow when old
The granite waits when we feel cold
But in between our births and deaths
We succumb to trials and tests
Some lift high and half are chance
Days flit by without a glance
Decisions made where future's lie
Choosing wrong, then making right
Youth know all 'fore wisdom sees
What we sow becomes our deeds
And if you ask someone who's old
What's important? You'll be told
To live and love, laugh and play
For no one knows when it's their day
To fall asleep and not awake
For life is short with no retakes
And right below your given name
They'll be a dash between the dates
Copyright ©
kie
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2005-06-12 10:11:45]
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Re: The Dash
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by nhisname2005 on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 10:25:29 AM AEST
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| A very enjoyable read because it is true, and understandable. |
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Re: The Dash
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 11:02:12 AM AEST
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Kie, this is excellent. It is rather sad to think life all comes down to a - (dash) in the end. No matter what you accomplished, how hard you worked, life still ends up a -. This is so true and the older I get the more I realize it is true. Brilliant.
Hugs,
Rita
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Re: The Dash
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 05:56:10 PM AEST
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Not only is this perfectly written, it's filled with such wisdom. Life is just shooting star, burning brightly only for a moment then gone forever. It's good to read something from you my dear friend.
Roses at your feet
Larry |
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Re: The Dash
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 03:57:27 PM AEST
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Kie this is an excellent poem, not only for the content, but for the truth. We do fall asleep, and unlike many think we don't go wondering off to heaven or someplace else. If he had wanted us in Heaven, he'd have kept us there. The fulitiy of death is just that, one dash, except for one more thing. "You will be known in the end by the tracks you leave behind!" So it note worthy that no one lives for naught.......we all live for others and in the end that's all they've got!
Marvelous Kie......just what I always expect of you!
Your comment on my Noah's poem was so kind........thank you dear, I'm so happy to be able to comment on yours again. I love your poetry, insight and wonderment!
Warm love dear friend,
ConSue |
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Re: The Dash
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by venkat on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 06:09:59 AM AEST
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| Marvellous my dear Kie..these are the words of wisdom..Keep writing on my friend:-)venkat |
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Re: The Dash
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by Dorkfish on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 04:21:49 PM AEST
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| Very good. From the heart! |
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Re: The Dash
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by bernard on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 08:59:29 AM AEST
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| Kie how very true. as an elderly man seventy five I can vouch for what you have written. The time is running away from me now when I was young everything went so slow.Especialy holidays it seemed forever between Christmas and the next Christmas now the months come and go so fast great poem. Keep smiling from bernard. |
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Re: The Dash
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by emystar on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 10:59:44 PM AEST
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So very true. I just lost a friend close to a month now.
This one is a masterpeice as I've never thought 'bout it in this way of thinking.
Wisdom shines thru these timeless words.
huggs, luv,
emy |
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Re: The Dash
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by Justintears on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:10:40 PM AEST
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| I have never felt so emotionaloly touched with words ever!!!!!!! I almost started tearing up... Brilliance has been acheived and so has a new admirer of your work. "Fantastic." |
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Re: The Dash
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 07:30:03 PM AEST
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I really like this one...not just for the good rhyming, and steady flow, but because of the wise words...Well done. I enjoyed this write!
Scorp. |
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Re: The Dash
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by that_gypsy_fire on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 10:11:47 AM AEST
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| I really liked this write. It's truthful, yet empowering. It's inspiring. great job! |
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Re: The Dash
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 08:48:32 PM AEST
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Very honest and straight forward: make the
best of your time and appreciate life while you
can because you don't know when it'll end.
Good job on this write. |
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Re: The Dash
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 10:52:41 PM AEST
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A most nobel write ..
I'd just left a comment to one who's veiw on life
was that of a narcissist..
and even though yours are contrary to his beliefs..
I'll say the same to you:
Don't live everyday as if it were your last,
live everyday as if it is your last.
Thaoughts and Prayers to You-
B |
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Re: The Dash
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by Manda2 on
Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 09:27:54 PM AEST
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| You need to write more Kie, your poems are really good. I like this one as it gives very good advise that none of us can ignore. Write another.....please! |
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Re: The Dash
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by CrazyCowboy557 on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 07:47:53 PM AEST
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| Very sad and very beautiful. A sentiment that will last through the ages. |
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Re: The Dash
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by kcampbell on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 09:40:45 AM AEST
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| I like it... thanks for the comment : ) Actually, I wote that one poem a while ago when I was kinda down. I like this one though, it is neat. Kinda makes you think... |
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Re: The Dash
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 11:16:17 AM AEST
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| This is really good. I like ur style in this. You have written a great dedication. |
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Re: The Dash
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by emystar on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 11:52:30 AM AEST
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Hey there friend,
Happy to see you have a couple writes here.
Very good writing.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: The Dash
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 16th August 2020 @ 07:09:02 PM AEST
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| Wonderful but sad. |
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