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[aid] => mick
[title] => Rebirth
[time] => 2005-06-27 19:59:20
[hometext] => This might be my final write.... I dunno... I feel as if I've lost the inspiration and, frankly, the talent to produce worthy poetry
[bodytext] => She awaits on the beach of a distant shore
With the waves washing over the sands
For the love that she lost in a life before
Holds his heart in her delicate hands
And he'll fly to her side on enchanted wings
There to find all the love they once knew
Once again to recapture the finer things
Dreamed by all but known by oh so few
As the sun falters there in the western skies
Falling low to the trembling sea
They will find in their soft and familiar eyes
Memories of what they used to be
Restless souls searching ever upon this Earth
For that one who gave meaning to breath
Eons pass, but a love that demands rebirth
Can't be held by the shackles of death
L. Carling c2005
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[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
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[topicname] => fantasy
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Rebirth
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Rakerman1999
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Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 07:59:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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She awaits on the beach of a distant shore
With the waves washing over the sands
For the love that she lost in a life before
Holds his heart in her delicate hands
And he'll fly to her side on enchanted wings
There to find all the love they once knew
Once again to recapture the finer things
Dreamed by all but known by oh so few
As the sun falters there in the western skies
Falling low to the trembling sea
They will find in their soft and familiar eyes
Memories of what they used to be
Restless souls searching ever upon this Earth
For that one who gave meaning to breath
Eons pass, but a love that demands rebirth
Can't be held by the shackles of death
L. Carling c2005
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Rakerman1999
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Re: Rebirth
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by Stitch on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 08:13:48 PM AEST
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I believe the need to write comes and goes. The talent is always there, but sometimes it is harder to wield the sword. God gives us rest when it is due. Don't be afraid to take yours...there is always a reason for it.
Beautiful as always and ...as always...understood.
Stitch |
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Re: Rebirth
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by Willofree on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 08:21:16 PM AEST
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A beautiful poem of committed love and eternity. Eloquently composed, and the poem wonderfully flows. True love spawns a lot of memories. '
Larry, I for one would hate to see you not continue. I have always admired your talent;; and wished I could write as well as you. I feel frequently that it's not poetry I'm writing; but rather just fancy prose.
I for one hope you stay, Larry. I see you as a poet!
Will, an aspiring poet
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Re: Rebirth
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 08:34:13 PM AEST
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Well Larry, if this is going to be it, you are going out on an AMAZING poem, and your talent is bleeding through each line, tho i do understand what the feeling of wanting to write and not wanting is, and how that affects what we as poets create.
Whatever your reasons for leaving and quiting are, best of luck to you and I'll miss the masterpieces that you produce
~Clark |
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Re: Rebirth
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by shelby on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 08:53:09 PM AEST
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I sent u a message here did you get it? The site has been down so Im not really sure if the messages are working or not. I miss you
Michelle |
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by shelby on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 09:02:00 PM AEST
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r u on msn Larry I cant believe this nothing is working what gives?? Argggggggggggg
Michelle |
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Re: Rebirth
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by shelby on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 09:10:25 PM AEST
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| u didnt answer me are you on msn messenger? mine is darkpetals36 |
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Re: Rebirth
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by GingerB on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 09:20:04 PM AEST
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If this isn't worthy poetry, I don't know what is!
Ginny |
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Re: Rebirth
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by PumpkinPie on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 10:21:25 PM AEST
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Well I haven't read poetry here in a long time,and I admit I've missed your writes.They're good as always and I don't see how this can be unworthy.But I can understand what you're feeling,I've been feeling the same way, hence my absence from writing.But I think somewhere along the line,as Stitch said,the talent never fades,there's just some moments where the heart may be at rest for a little while.If you must,take some time off,but don't ever forget your fans,the ones who feel a wave of comfort and happiness in reading your writes.And remember:You can't always write something to your exact liking everytime.But there will always be one person out there who you'll touch and that's quite an accomplishment.
PumpkinPie |
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Re: Rebirth
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by CarolinaBlue on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 11:12:29 PM AEST
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| Unworthy couldn't be farther from the truth! It is always a joy to read poetry written so beautifully. ~Robyn |
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Re: Rebirth
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 08:35:19 AM AEST
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You have a talent L. It isn't one that is going to disappear or leave you completely because this is how you express the inner man who is you.
Even if you take a breather, inspiration will come again, this I know.
Beautiful, yet I wonder about the last stanza and it has me deep in a philosophical mood.
Don't stop writing, you give meaning to poetry.
K- |
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Re: Rebirth
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by Arannon on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 10:00:38 AM AEST
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Ahh. I'm a newbie here, so I haven't sampled so many of the posted poems, but I think you are one of the best poem writers here. I really like your style. The poem isn't sappy or corny; it feels right.
Maybe this is just me, but I feel that there is some allusion to Tolkien writings here. Do you know of the story of Earendil and Elwing? Or maybe Finrod and Amarie.... I dunno. This poem is great in the fact that it's so all-encompassing.
It is your desicion on whether to keep on writing or not, but my wish is that you will. This is the first truly worthy poem that I have seen on this site, and makes me think that maybe there is some treasure under the sand after all. |
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Re: Rebirth
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 12:34:41 PM AEST
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beautiful as always Larry, I hope to read more from you when you feel ready to post again, wish you all the best my friend *hugs*
Pix xx
You will be missed by all on the site :( |
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Re: Rebirth
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 02:14:31 PM AEST
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Beautifully written..
Oh my did I write that lol. JK..
Anything written with beach, waves, sea takes my breath away..
I for one would like to see you keep writing. I love imagery, metaphor..
I am not sure what poetry is anymore, or if it is prose or what it is..
To me.. beautiful words are poetry to me.. no matter how it is written.. its all art form..
I write and enjoy myself as I do it..
Promise you will keep writing, and not let the judges out there make you feel inferior. Never shut down..
It takes lots of guts if you will, to be able to share your writing pieces.. Until I found this site.. no one except my family and a few friends have ever seen my works..
My first few comments shocked me, but I kept going... I have a calling.. poetry is me. Even when I do oil paintings, I am writing poetry..
Good luck in the future in your beautiful writing.
Raquel Leah (poetress)
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Re: Rebirth
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 06:03:35 PM AEST
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Very nice write welcome back and as far as
the need, how i have the need 2 be onstage
again and do what i was meant 2 do larry,
but instead i'm on here making like a poet,
i ain't even going there as far as wheather
your writting is worth it or not, that's like
calling the holy grail a dixie cup lol. or calling
nolan ryan, just another pitcher, u keep
writting i'll keep reading, i don't want to hear it
lol. bar keep u know the drill . . .
Ben
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Re: Rebirth
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 09:38:38 AM AEST
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It would be silly for me to say that I hope you'll keep writing, wouldn't it? You must already know that... you know, I'm sure, that I adore your poetry.
This is no exception. I find in this what I find in so many of your writes... something relatable, something rather gently put but enormous at the same time, something... that I know myself and can therefore understand. The entire piece is beautiful - but it is those last two lines that tug at me so. Those last two lines speak volumes.
Stitchy's right... take the rest if it is time for one. Your heart will know when it is time to pick up the pen again. I suspect you wouldn't be able not to... and I, like the others, find comfort in that.
Learning, myself, to be patient - but understanding how difficult it can,
~Snem~ |
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Re: Rebirth
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 10:51:48 AM AEST
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Well, I don't know what that crap is at the top of your poem because you can produce worthy poetry. How can you just give up at doing something... if you don't like the way you write then work on it. This is really a great poem. I was living in your poem. Plus, your poem speaks the truth. Love demanding rebirth can't be held back by shackles of death. Great write... I hope you continue to write...
Jodi |
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Re: Rebirth
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by slogan on
Wednesday, 7th December 2005 @ 04:38:26 PM AEST
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| great write...jh |
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