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Array ( [sid] => 145647 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Open Up The Sky [time] => 2008-10-11 07:24:18 [hometext] => I get the feeling that I have more to add to this, but not now, not yet. It's not unfinished... but somehow not yet complete. I hope you understand [bodytext] => Please open up the sky,
and let me fall into the void,
left behind by all the stars.

Let the moon stand guard against the sun,
and never show another day,
I need no light to lead my way,
just let me sit here in the dark,

then when I cry no one will see,
and I will think a while...
just my night, and me. [comments] => 13 [counter] => 446 [topic] => 21 [informant] => lostinmyself [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 25 [ratings] => 5 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Lifepoems )
Open Up The Sky

Contributed by lostinmyself on Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 07:24:18 AM in AEST
Topic: Lifepoems



Please open up the sky,
and let me fall into the void,
left behind by all the stars.

Let the moon stand guard against the sun,
and never show another day,
I need no light to lead my way,
just let me sit here in the dark,

then when I cry no one will see,
and I will think a while...
just my night, and me.




Copyright © lostinmyself ... [ 2008-10-11 07:24:18]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 08:04:40 AM AEST
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Oh Sweetie!!! (I can see why you wanted to use the Emerson quote-- very befitting)

I'm so glad to be reading another new piece by you. And this is a perfect lostinmyself write, if you know
what I mean. There is melancholy in this, but I do not feel sad. Somehow there is solace in the night, even if it
encounters tears, you know? I can't tell you how impressed I am with your work, (each and every time) and
if you only knew how many times, "gosh! I wish I'd written that" crosses my lips, you'd be amazed!

This is so powerful for so brief a write. Sometimes I believe the brevity of a write is what MAKES it stand
out. It is forced to impress the reader sooner and with more impact. Your work is always a sensational read.
Regardless of genre or sentiment. And I look forward to them with genuine enthusiasm. THIS piece, is why.

Remarkable sweets. As always and exactly what I come to expect from you every time.

loves you

*hugs*

~ Breezy



Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 11:13:23 AM AEST
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Amazing write, Lost... A sad piece but with a hint of promise of a better life..
Jenni


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 12th October 2008 @ 12:13:16 PM AEST
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I love this poem, I can get a vivid picture
and I think that every poem to be
good should be vivid and this one certainly is!
It feels like a fresh starry night!


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 12th October 2008 @ 12:55:17 PM AEST
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You may feel you need to add

quantity to this Phill, but as for

quality, never my brilliant friend,

brownning's got nothing on you.

beautiful work as always i would

exspect no less . . .



liewise thank you 4 your read

and comment, take care . . .


Ben . . .



Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Monday, 13th October 2008 @ 03:15:06 AM AEST
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Awesome work, my friend.
Huggs, smiles, blessings,
emy


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 15th October 2008 @ 02:38:34 PM AEST
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Though I may be far away and the night is dark, still I can hear the sobbing, and it echoes...
Beautifully done sis.


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Wachumiri on Wednesday, 15th October 2008 @ 09:39:02 PM AEST
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I know exactly what you mean! My ocean, the way I lose myself in the waves, the rain, the tides, the crashing water. Your night is my ocean.
I really don't know what else to say to that, just that, with a grin, I know what you mean.
Take care you.
David


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by rebelwcause on Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 06:44:04 PM AEST
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great write way to put your emotions out there i enjoyed it bravo


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by outlawpoet on Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 08:46:23 PM AEST
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i like this poem mostly cause i can relate but its also a smooth read


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 8th November 2008 @ 10:05:16 PM AEST
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This is a very beautiful write and i feel this way myself, cursing the sun for shining when all I want is darkness. Awesome job!


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Loende on Saturday, 15th November 2008 @ 09:47:05 PM AEST
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You walk in beauty, like the night.

I love this poem, because I see you in it. It's a lovely, emotive piece that lives and breathes...

So you sit, and think a while. I'll watch you.

Love,
~dawn



Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 02:00:04 AM AEST
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absolutely beautifully stunning hun, powerful and gentle at the same time, by far one of my new favorites of yours,

hugs n' love nessa

@->>->-


Re: Open Up The Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 3rd December 2008 @ 01:27:48 AM AEST
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Wow!. I really like the way this is written. Short yet powerful with emotion and really great imagery....very visual emotions if that makes sense. Some sadness within this write and yet comfort while you take your thoughts in by yourself. Everyone needs a little alone time.

Take care and thank you for sharing this with us. You are a great poetess.

Tim




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