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Guaranteed
Contributed by
boobiepeach
on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 06:16:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Told
Me with head lowered
With drunken tears in eye
With a whimper in voice
To never stop
You
Shared with level
Uncertainty of warmth
Hasty actions of self
Longing for my mirth
To never stop
Told
Nothing to promise
Promise the world
Promise your love
Your trust in my praise
To never stop
You
Trust of the weak
Showed to disprove
Eating words of ambrosia
Life of waiting for forever to end
To never stop
Told
Good intensions of salt
Bad inspiration to want
Forever a distortion
Forever a rock
To never stop
You
Know nothing guarantees
Watch the clock melt
Your brush and hour no longer strokes
Hold nothing but me higher then ground
To never stop
Told
Listen to my lies in trust
We will always have the memory
Think back to life of smile
Misses the safe
Tingles in hand to fall
To never stop
You
Fall asleep in pain
To wake with no heart
Lie to others in bed of roses
To them not clear as day
Translucent to me
To never stop
You told
Copyright ©
boobiepeach
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2005-07-05 18:16:16]
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Re: Guaranteed
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 09:25:48 PM AEST
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wow..truly a unique poem..i really enjoyed it.
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Re: Guaranteed
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by Dorkfish on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:52:01 AM AEST
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| Hey, good one. It is very unique and a funky style. I like it a lot. I feel your thoughts mate. Good write and **** Tim! |
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Re: Guaranteed
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:07:18 AM AEST
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Very unique and creative write, which deals effectively with what appears to be a relationship involving a heavy drinker or alcoholic. Focuses on the broken promises and other travesties of such a relationship.
Well done, peach. It's a real tribute to your poetry to be willing to be creative and try new approaches.
Will
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Re: Guaranteed
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 02:17:21 PM AEST
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Excellent insight to users. Alcoholics and drug users are all the same. Nothing is real or forever with them. They will lie, deny, steal anything to get what they want. They are all like sociopaths; only they and their needs matter and pain to them does not exist because of their choice of elixirs. Excellent write.
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Re: Guaranteed
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 03:57:09 AM AEST
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Very well explained
worded perfect
very nice job |
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Re: Guaranteed
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by shep on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 11:16:26 PM AEST
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| very rewarding to read. thanks. |
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