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Never Lived
Contributed by
Essentially9
on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:10:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Never Lived
Coldness stares back at me,
And I blink it away.
Words were never spoken,
And the dreams never seen
As anything but frayed
And forsaken.
I've never lived,
And even when I die,
I still won't be as dead
As I am now when
I cry
Tears of red.
Mascara doesn't ruin
The perfect picture
Of portrayed sorrow,
But enhances the hues in
Painted textures
Blackened for tomorrow.
My eyes are as cold
As a mirror's reflection,
And I can't bear
To even hold
Their gaze without hesitation
Of returning the glare.
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Essentially9
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Re: Never Lived
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by lostrelic on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:16:58 PM AEST
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| very nice writen i like the part with the mascara keep up the good work |
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Re: Never Lived
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:21:00 PM AEST
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WOW. What a powerful write Jen..!! Truly each stanza outshines the last. You really did a remarkable job with this piece. Your expression and feeling behind each line is so strong in this write...Well, well done!!
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Re: Never Lived
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:25:35 PM AEST
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Amazingly written as always jen..as scorp saud each stanza forces you to read the next and it only gets better with each one..Awesome lil sis, as always
~Clark |
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Re: Never Lived
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 08:34:22 PM AEST
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very nice write...the second stanza especially moved me
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Re: Never Lived
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 09:05:29 PM AEST
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raw power with this write so deep
Michelle |
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Re: Never Lived
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 01:53:53 AM AEST
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A timeless portrait of the sorrowful Madonna..
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Re: Never Lived
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:01:51 AM AEST
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You are the essence of poetry, mistress of
the masterpeices you create, this poem
especially the line " And even when i die, i
still won't be as dead i am now when i cry "
all i can say is the phrase i use to hate when
people said to me about playing music in
some dive, and that is, WHAT THE HELL
ARE YOU DOING IN THIS PLACE? " a
stunning peice of poetic perfection . . .
Ben |
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Re: Never Lived
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by xXcrossedXx on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 11:52:04 PM AEST
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This was a great write I feel like this came more from your heart.. this was very well written and each stanza was packed with meaning and a great message. Well done, another one of my favorites, I can't choose a favorite stanza they are all amazing... well done,
.amanda. |
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Re: Never Lived
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by emystar on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 11:41:39 PM AEST
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Awesome writing as always.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Never Lived
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 10:39:59 PM AEST
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You have such depth.
This piece in particular holds such pained sorrow, more so than you should ever bear.
If I may ever lighten your load, I am here. |
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Re: Never Lived
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by midian on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 06:54:43 AM AEST
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| Wow what a powerful poem. i found it quite moving and i certainly drew inspiration from this piece thankyou for the wonderful share |
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