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THE RAIN
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:58:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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listen carefully to the pattern of the rain
within every raindrop is held so much pain
souls crying out and screaming for death
choking on life and gasping for breath
listen carefully to the rhythm of the rain
each a teardrop that was shed in vain
perfect in size, shape, and form
they fall together and become the storm
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2005-07-06 10:58:59]
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Re: THE RAIN
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by ShaBa on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:07:52 AM AEST
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| You got something going here! Add a couple more verses, because it left me wanting more. |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by PinkPoet on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:14:28 AM AEST
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| I like this poem, it's not predictable and it flows well! great job =) |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by boobiepeach on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:33:52 AM AEST
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perfect write. please more!
simlpe but so complex. i love the symbolism.
peach |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by Dorkfish on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:46:20 AM AEST
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| Great job. I do have to agree though, it left me wanting more. Good job and great metaphore. |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 12:10:02 PM AEST
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This was wonderful you expressed the words so well. Looking forward to readiing more of your writes.
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 01:42:43 PM AEST
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nice poem i loved it:)
butterflygirl40 |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 01:45:40 PM AEST
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| Nice poem that expressed pain. Whether it is rain or tears, it all comes across as dark deep rooted pain. Thanks for this lovely poem! joni |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 04:10:20 AM AEST
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my name's not Jennie but i'll comment anyway. lol
This poem is very well put together
and flows great from begining to end
Let tears flow for happiness
because your writing is so good
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Re: THE RAIN
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 08:02:58 AM AEST
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| this is incredible, well done |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by trini on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 04:34:14 PM AEST
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WOW, very exceptional, I love your choice of words.
-trini |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by vibes2go on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 06:00:05 PM AEST
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| .... but I find rain peaceful .. |
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Re: THE RAIN
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by EverlastingDawn on
Tuesday, 23rd August 2005 @ 08:20:26 AM AEST
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Wow. I love that poem
Everything just seems to fit, and flows nicely. Emotion pours out from the words. It's short but sweet, you might want to add more to it, but its great the way that it is.
Amazing Write
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