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Human Flight Committee
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 05:01:40 PM in AEST
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In the tube
Emerged a base
Rising roots
Eradicates
The soil that sits
And advocates
For the rights
They seek to violate
Current statistics
Suggests
Blueprinted specifics
On combinations
Of structural fitness
Potential collapse
In the cemented
Foundations
Overlap
And crack
Ten Commandments
Still intact
Modeled on
A prototype
Of scientific fantasy
Of human flight
And in the hype
Of wings to
Rocket packs
Belted on tight
Gas to its backs
Fumes react
Lifted explosion
Direct impact
Flooded roads
Struck trees
Improperly
Clotted cuts
Blood pours
Heart beats
Randomly about
Vocal chords
Cry then shout
Overboard
A complete
Totalitarian
Sell out
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Re: Human Flight Committee
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 05:46:46 PM AEST
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this poem is awsome
and I love the name of it
you should take a bow for
yourself because I already did |
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Re: Human Flight Committee
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 06:21:14 PM AEST
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Take a bow indeed!!! You are a poetic GENIUS!! Don't slough it off either, because I wouldn't say that if I didn't think it were true...You wrote an absolutely stunning write here jyss! Be proud, and please don't ever stop ; )
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Re: Human Flight Committee
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 10:10:41 PM AEST
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These writes are from the abyss..
no-one ever knows what you are going to feel or say next..
This was...so bloody deep and painful-
It is, I have to say, one of the most moving writes by you yet..
"Potential collapse
In the cemented
Foundations
Overlap
And crack
Ten Commandments
Still intact"
and..
"Improperly
Clotted cuts
Blood pours
Heart beats
Randomly about"
amazing-
B
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