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Heart Felt
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:00:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Heart Felt
I painted your lovely picture,
And it's a masterpiece.
The canvas's course texture
Brings out the eyes that cease
To be your best feature.
I cannot paint a bleeding love
Without blending mixtures
Of blackened blood.
I haven't captured
The shadow of tears,
Because they rapture
A soul devoid of fears,
And that doesn't create
The perfect picture.
A hint of sadness makes
Heart felt tinctures
That still do not bring
Out the eyes that are pleasured
By a love that still sings
In an enrapt heart assured
That her eyes will make
My lasting love demure
Enough to paint
Her lost allure.
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Re: Heart Felt
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by shelby on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:04:01 PM AEST
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this has a mysterious air to it beautiful as always
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Re: Heart Felt
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:07:40 PM AEST
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Yes Jen, Awesome write, the ending is very sutle, and very powerful at the same time, i really like the flowing stanzas and the 2nd stanza ALOT, beautiful Jen, as always
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Re: Heart Felt
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by pixie on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:13:54 PM AEST
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beautiful and sad, a great mix of emotions in this write
pix xx |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 08:56:00 PM AEST
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You really DO lament for saddness and sorrow:
"I haven't captured
The shadow of tears,
Because they rapture
A soul devoid of fears,
And that doesn't create
The perfect picture.
A hint of sadness makes
Heart felt tinctures"
..these stanzas tell me so-
amazing all the same..
I enjoyed it very much.
B
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Re: Heart Felt
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 09:21:08 PM AEST
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| Hauntingly beautiful as many of your writes are. I think that's why I come to read them, they breathe of mystery and sadness. This poem really had a great flow one line left me grasping at the next. Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:09:02 PM AEST
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Well done Jen...I really enjoyed this one. Each stanza held its own, but the third was my favourite...the ending was the wonderful woe I've come to expect of your writes ; )
Scorp. |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 12:50:56 AM AEST
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Spellbinding lost with in the heart every nuance that can be felt i felt in these
words, you come through with such a womanly wantingness, this beautiful . . .
Ben |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 01:02:23 AM AEST
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| wow jen wow |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 04:57:00 PM AEST
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*Bravo* this is wonderfull. Creative and yet so outstanding. I loved this.
Jane xxx |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 10:00:29 AM AEST
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I love this! This is a great write with an extremely powerful ending, like always. I just love the last line: 'Enough to paint/Her lost allure' it's beautiful. Well done!
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Re: Heart Felt
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by emystar on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 11:30:21 PM AEST
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A masterpeice, my friend. Very touching write.
Very deep.
huggs, keep writing,
emy |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 08:07:21 AM AEST
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Amazing write. This was indeed a masterpiece I loved it
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Heart Felt
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 31st December 2005 @ 05:47:50 PM AEST
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Wow, now I see this has some great imagery! A bit dark and emotionally sad yet the imagery does paint a perfect picture because it tells a tale that lets us see an artist at work. And you are an artist.
She has lost her allure but your write is very alluring.
Thank you for sharing and take care.
Tim
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