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Bleeding Black
Contributed by
pUnKa_RaCh
on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:37:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Veins are so invaded
With evils so pervaded
The moon awakens and so does my internal darkness
That saturates
And condemns my once
Pure and righteous soul.
Shadows speak and call my wretched name
With a voice so
Sweet and seductive
So passionate and fulfilling
Evil soul I am, treacherous sinful being
Of which contains
No wholesome light
Darkening everything I touch
I must die tonight
Lying spirit is dying, must bring it to its end
Taking hold of the dagger
I wrench my heart with full force
In order to dry it of all illness
Weaken its only source
For my spirit
Is
So soaked in darkness
That when my flesh is torn
I bleed black.
My veins are so invaded
With evils so pervaded
Im bleeding black
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pUnKa_RaCh
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Re: Bleeding Black
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by Kitty06 on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:46:36 PM AEST
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| I love your choice of words in this poem. 'pervaded, condemn, saturate' it's refreshing to read a poem with good vocabulary. The idea of being so evil that you bleed black is amazing. It expresses the idea of a doomed death. Excellent write. |
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Re: Bleeding Black
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:48:13 PM AEST
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Beautiful darkness Rach..
I love the repetitive 1st and last stanzas..
it felt.. "full circle"
B
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Re: Bleeding Black
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by wizard on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 10:59:31 PM AEST
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that truly is awesome!!
to describe darkness a beautifully as you do is sheer genius.
i love it.
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Re: Bleeding Black
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 12:06:30 AM AEST
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A very compelling peice of poetry, written not only 2 reach out but 2 touch another being
and possibly pull them 2 your evil realm, balck is the color of this work of dark art, a most sumpious journey in to the macarbre . . .
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Re: Bleeding Black
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 01:14:46 AM AEST
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wow truely amazing how dark this is.
awsome job. |
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Re: Bleeding Black
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 01:09:54 PM AEST
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i too love your use of words
it was an utterly fantastic poem
well done
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