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The Only Thing I Like About Winter
Contributed by
xXcrossedXx
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Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 11:32:30 AM in AEST
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It's the snowflakes that spark
My memory.
The dancing white flakes
Doing ballet.
Swooping and swirling,
Twisting and twirling.
Perfectly landing onto a head,
A meadow of dirt colored string.
Painting a picture
Of beauty and grace,
Slowly and swiftly
Melting down to his face.
Determined and manly
Seeming to soften a bit.
Silently moving to fire filled eyes,
Icing them slowly
To reveal lighter browns,
Hints of hazel could be seen
Through the cracks.
The flakes one by one fell down
From the face where they hide
And cover the roads.
Creating a mirage
Of blank cotton candy.
Once inside
The snow flakes follow in,
Dropping like bombs into,
A dark pool.
Instantly floating
Like little cubed bouys.
Our young tender lips gently touch
The rim of the glass,
With the same gentleness as the flakes
Landing on his head.
Sip by sip the bathtub drains,
No more flakes enter the pool
And pretty soon the chocolatey water is gone.
He stands on his deck,
As I skip down the road,
To my home.
Watching the white puffy clouds
Swooping and swirling,
Twisting and twirling,
Dancing around me,
Dropping like bird's crap onto his head.
Happiness; beauty, filling the streets.
That's my favorite part of winter.
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Re: The Only Thing I Like About Winter
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 11:46:52 PM AEST
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"Dropping like bird's crap onto his head." i believe thats the only time i will ever read that in a poem, so very original. ::backs away slowly:: lol. you had a lot of metaphores in this to dress it up. im not one that likes imagery, but for all those that do, you painted the perfect picture. which is not a part of poetry that many can do. impressing, but i rather like fall better =]
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Re: The Only Thing I Like About Winter
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by fielding88 on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 01:29:35 PM AEST
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| The "Only" thing? lol, if this isn't your favorite season (like it is mine) then I can only imagine how much imagery you could provide for one of the other three! I'm a sucker for winter poetry for some reason, and this was no exception. I agree with Jen, lol that brid's crap line was quite unique and unexpected, and I must say, this is one poem packed with images of winter and fanciful (sp?) things..lol. It was admirable to say the least. Excellent piece I might add! |
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