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lonely
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 02:00:27 AM in AEST
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the sensation of emptiness consumes my soul
controls my mind, makes me grow cold
a deep emotion brings me closer to death
brings blood to the surface and shortens my breath
no one beside me to say its alright
no one to give vision when i have lost sight
no arms to embrace me when i want to cry
this empty space in me makes me want to die
makes living pointless when you're on your own
nobody cares when you're all alone
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Re: lonely
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by SinginSilence on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 02:17:34 AM AEST
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Honestly, this seems very generic and boring.
i wish i had some more constructive criticisms, maybe you could try like a simile or... something poetic. |
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Re: lonely
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 03:30:34 AM AEST
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Very sad but well written.
some folks if they don't have any thing good to say should just move on.
This is great writing and I'm sorry u feel so alone.
Pay no attention to the heart less.
U r a good writer.
huggs, faith, hope, joy, peace,
emy
pm me any time. I don't do instent message cause I don't have time.
Hang tuff. |
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Re: lonely
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 04:54:52 AM AEST
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| awesome poem. and i can totally relate. great job. peace. jena |
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Re: lonely
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 06:40:44 AM AEST
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| incredible, well done! |
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Re: lonely
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by poisonpen00ad on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 09:57:49 PM AEST
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| Great write. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: lonely
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by spazz911 on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 01:31:33 AM AEST
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sry i can't tranfer to ur house wenever u need me but i am here only 10 min away
plz talk
great write
kc |
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Re: lonely
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by Jaycee on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 12:37:58 PM AEST
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Jennie
This is a great poem, so well written with powerful sentiment. It's so real, so... I dunno... it just gets to me. |
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