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I'm Screaming!
Contributed by
xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
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Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 04:53:21 PM in AEST
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I'm screaming!
I'm screaming!
I know I am!
My throat is hurting!
I'm screaming!
I'm screaming!
I have to be!
The sound is clear!
I'm screaming!
I'm screaming!
You know I am!
You're just not listening!
I'm screaming!
I'm screaming!
And I'm still waiting,
For you to hear!
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Re: I'm Screaming!
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by Wannabe on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 05:26:12 PM AEST
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I like it. It's doesn't rhyme all the way through but that isn't a requirement of this art form. You explained to me how you are feeling well and I was able to sense your despair very quickly.
I also like the name and thought I'd share a little story with you regarding screaming. Up until a few years ago I was in the Marine Corps and when we ran we sang cadance in order to ensure that everyone was breathing properly. The way we knew that we had been on a motivational run was by the hoarseness of our voices later that day. Sometimes our voices would pretty much go out completely and, believe it or not, this was something that made us happy.
Happy travels. Keep writing. |
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Re: I'm Screaming!
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 11:46:55 AM AEST
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I like it the message is clear and its a fun little read... in a depressed way (lol.) The repetition will quickly be criticized but thats okay this was a fun piece that sent a good message. Also a good write to get excess thoughts out, get you brainstorming and ready to make a phenominal poem.
Good job cuz,
.amanda. |
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Re: I'm Screaming!
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by fireispassion on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 12:07:30 PM AEST
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| i love it!!!!!!! |
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