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Why So Reluctant to Live
Contributed by
pUnKa_RaCh
on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 09:55:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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My vision is a blur
Im choking on air
Got suicidal thoughts
Do I really dare?
Everything is frightening
Scared to look ahead
Future discomforting
All is colourless all is dead
My fading soul
My shallow heart beat
My shamed conscience.
With peace shall never meet
Sleepless nights familiar
This emotional abuse
Im heading nowhere
Flailing without a use
My fake happiness
Grimace and pretend
Wrecking inside
Different message I send
Still hate tomorrow
I long for yesterday
Always cry over nothing
Eager to run away
Pain and hopelessness
True love unmet
My emptiness unfilled
Sins I cant forget
Too much to ask for
Not enough to give
Shrouded by sadness
Reluctant to live.
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pUnKa_RaCh
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2005-07-13 21:55:09]
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Re: Why So Reluctant to Live
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 10:28:09 PM AEST
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I always have a hard time commenting on these dark and anguished pieces of work. Not to say they aren't good but it is so different from how I see life. So when you see a little dove with no comment, please know I read it but couldn't find a suitable comment in my happy soul. Dove
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Re: Why So Reluctant to Live
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by poisonpen00ad on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 11:05:06 PM AEST
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| This is an awesome write. As for dark work sometimes there is therapy in writing these things down and expressing true, live, rawl emotion. When life gets you down pick up your pen and fight back. You have done a great job of this. |
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Re: Why So Reluctant to Live
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by LolaWhite on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 02:31:08 PM AEST
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WOW! So powerful and yes your fellow poets can relate. "My fake happiness...Grimace and pretend" Words that I can relate to for sure.
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Re: Why So Reluctant to Live
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 07:19:44 AM AEST
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Very well done. Powerful and sad emotions, and yes...I think more of us can relate to your words than will admit. I have certainly felt this way before, and I think you've captured the anguish quite well. You drew the reader in with the first couple of lines, and from there everything flowed smoothly right down to the haunting end...Great job!
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Re: Why So Reluctant to Live
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 07:45:08 PM AEST
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Rach..
Your sadness is like a raging river : (
and your choice of words, even more fierce-
I feel your pain..
It's beautiful sadness..
my heart bleeds for you, in that one day
you will truly become happy my friend-
with Love-
B
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