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Pulse Fails
Contributed by
pUnKa_RaCh
on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 09:58:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Self- condemning spirit
Has all but lied and fought
For any sense of redemption
Everything Ive sorely sought
Sinister caves hide forgiveness
Shadows gently do tear apart
This Dispossessed soul I own
From the way you stake my heart
Unrepentant evildoer I am
Mark my forehead as a sinner
Damn me to eternal pain
For sin thats been made my winner
Moral strength does weaken
Must perish to gain hopes filling
To receive such virtuous favour
To be saved by this self-killing
Much awaited for ending nears
Darkness prevails
Spirit finally takes its leave
Pulse fails.
Copyright ©
pUnKa_RaCh
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2005-07-13 21:58:17]
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Re: Pulse Fails
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 10:31:29 PM AEST
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Re: Pulse Fails
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by poisonpen00ad on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 10:57:05 PM AEST
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| Wow! Good work. I enjoyed the way you have expressed this. |
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Re: Pulse Fails
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by emystar on
Saturday, 16th July 2005 @ 09:42:24 AM AEST
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Very sad but unfortunatly so true at times.
We are born into sin where everyones veiws are different. It's hard to find ones inner self at times 'cause everyone is different. We can bring goodness or pain on our selves sometimes. Personally I know I'm somebody 'cause god don't make no junk.
Still I tottally understand the feelings. I've had um too at different times.
Now i savor lifes sweetness 'cause I know as long as theire's writng to do then he got plenty reasons to keep me here and that is write, write, write.
Very good work.
huggs,
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Re: Pulse Fails
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 12:52:13 AM AEST
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| very dakr poetry but extremly well writte. i love the way the ending comes together. i like your vocabulary and the way things are said bluntly. you did such a great job with this write. (i know sometimes we write and dont really believe in what we write, we just like the concept but ...just saying that a sinner wont endure "eternal pain" if they ask for forgiveness ....just sayin...) anyways another great write ! |
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Re: Pulse Fails
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 07:49:26 PM AEST
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Wow Rach-
very well written..
and I LOVE the short, haulting composition of
the final two stanzas..
I think you are my new favorite dark Queen.. lol
"Sinister caves hide forgiveness
Shadows gently do tear apart
This Dispossessed soul I own
From the way you stake my heart"
that is so awesome-
B
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