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Ballad From A Fish Tank
Contributed by
MomentInTime
on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 06:09:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Friday night, the week is over, some folks say its meant for fun.
after months of quiet living, thought Id go and get me some;
so I jumped into my car to seek my fortunes at a singles bar.
Now the scene was not much different from the one Id known before,
so I started walking circles round and round that dancing floor;
and just when Id had enough,
you stepped out of the dark and moved your stuff.
Magic sparkling with the music, every note one more caress.
Then my mind was set on fire as the light shone thru your dress,
and I cried My God how sweet,
your silhouette looks good enough to eat!
More and more the wheels kept turning, imaginations on the race.
When you spun around I noticed a wanton look upon your face,
and it was more than I could take
to think of planting kisses where you ache.
Well the night was half-way over, so I thought I could I might,
gain a choice of your agreement, on a change of luck tonight;
but what I saw just blew my chance:
cos someone else had stepped into your dance.
Copyright ©
MomentInTime
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2005-07-17 06:09:03]
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Re: Ballad From A Fish Tank
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 06:37:37 AM AEST
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| Aw, darn...it was all looking so good up til that last part. Lol. Thanks for making me smile, hehe |
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Re: Ballad From A Fish Tank
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by CarolinaBlue on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 01:12:46 PM AEST
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Aw shucks Jordan, I thought you were gonna "get lucky", not a flush down the toilet...love the title, how appropriate! good write
~Blue~ |
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Re: Ballad From A Fish Tank
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 02:34:56 PM AEST
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Awww Jordan...that sucks! Well, you know...there's other fish in the sea....LOL Nice write : )
Scorp.
(Who just had to say it! hehe.) |
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Re: Ballad From A Fish Tank
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 03:43:48 PM AEST
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He who doesn't jerk the line quickly and snare the prize, loses. ME lol
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Re: Ballad From A Fish Tank
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 01:43:13 AM AEST
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Wasn't quite what I was expecting from the title, but...
It's still very cute, even with the sad ending. The flow is really done well here too. Cheers! J.
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Re: Ballad From A Fish Tank
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by gwenevere on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 06:52:52 AM AEST
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Damn and Damn again.Isn't that just the way .
Never mind, better luck next time, Ros |
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