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Never Going Back
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 08:42:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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As I am sitting here
I lean unbalanced
And fall off my chair
The cold white marble tiled floor beneath me
Engulfs me and shatters a bone
Sending me back to what really matters
Face busted up from the nasty cut
Which tore open the slut and slit the throat
Of the man who shouted look up
From on the rooftop where the gardens flourished
Where the artists sat for a pompous self portrait
I need a good response
Something encouraging for once
A little spice with a flare that adds fire to the funk
Mindful manners that entice one to subscribe to life
Planted roots that have grasped the concept of freedom and happiness
If I rise now
I may or may not surely fall
My back aches from the hunching over mistake
When once I guessed, I would never come back at all
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Re: Never Going Back
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 09:01:54 PM AEST
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Wow. I had to re-read this a few times, just because what it stands for is so incredible! This is great jyss...I'm really, really happy for you : )
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Re: Never Going Back
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 10:17:13 PM AEST
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Nothing can stop your vigor jyss..
nothing..
(Break em all...and you'll probably write with your
toes..just don't break those)
and don't fall off your chair again..
marble is hard!.. lol
Great write-
As Always..
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Re: Never Going Back
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 10:25:02 PM AEST
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I feel ya jyss...
not a "hunching over mistake"
you go...keep on and go..
I feel ya-
B
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Re: Never Going Back
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 09:23:27 AM AEST
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Very visual, like the part of the artist on the roof, also, " sending me back to what realy matters" that's a cool peice of reality, nice writting the flow was right . . .
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