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God's Affection
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 09:44:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
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God's Affection
The tears I shed at night gather at the edge of my pillow.
Uneased as I constantly cry, and unheard go my bellows.
Time and eternity seem against me, for they strangle my joy and happiness.
My life is merely worth a mockery, as I am bound by chains of sadness.
Discontent with my current position, as it feels I am running in circles.
My life is a waste and not worth mention, and there stands no pain so hurtful.
Christ on the cross, must have had it better then this.
Words- I am at a loss, and it seems I shall never acquire bliss.
So if there really is a savior, I now look to the sky and ask for mercy.
I don't want you to overlook my behavior, I plead for you to murder me.
. . .
The mirror shatters and falls to the floor, I no longer stand in reflection.
Flames envelope my body and submerse my core. My death was his only shown affection.
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Re: God's Affection
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 11:37:14 PM AEST
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There are times that some of feel that way my friend.A very emotional write.
take care
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Re: God's Affection
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 12:58:36 AM AEST
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Re: God's Affection
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 10:00:44 AM AEST
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I couldn't fault the poem because I thought it was brilliantly written without error.
But this was dark, depressive, angry and it touched me, deeply.
Kie |
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Re: God's Affection
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 10:31:30 PM AEST
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Oh wow Clark, is everything okay? This is a very sad and disturbing write...Your emotions were expressed very well in this piece, but that ending is quite haunting to say the least! I hope this is fiction, and you're alright...Good job with this write.
Scorp. |
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Re: God's Affection
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Wednesday, 20th July 2005 @ 07:32:59 AM AEST
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Sublime clark.
ABsolutely splendid.
So emotive and wrenched with darkness and tragedy. The writer seems to be crying out for sympathy.
These dark words my heart can relate to very much.
Brilliantly written.
Outstanding my friend! |
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Re: God's Affection
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 12:20:07 AM AEST
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A very deep and awesomely well written write. This is a brilliant and stunning piece, a job well done as usual.
~D.S. Hammoulton~
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Re: God's Affection
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 10:50:39 PM AEST
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Oh my dear friend, Clark. I hope that all is well with u? This is an amazing, deep and dark poem written with such perfection. One of your best I've read. Truly talented and gifted you are. If ya need to talk please pm me. I worry about u my dear friend.
Otherwise a brillantly conveyed piece of poetry.
Hugs,
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Re: God's Affection
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 08:27:32 PM AEST
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I love this write
I hope this is just poetry and not
real feelings for you
its so hard to tell
because the emotions expressed were so real and true
great write |
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Re: God's Affection
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by Archie on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 12:06:47 PM AEST
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Your poem while well writen also rises a cause for concern in me. You wrote:
"So if there really is a savior, I now look to the sky and ask for mercy.
I don't want you to overlook my behavior, I plead for you to murder me."
This attitude in your poem is seemingly suicidal and self-destructive. If there are things you are unsettled about in your heart know that there are people you can talk to about them. I am one of them.
I do hope you come to understand God's affection.
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Re: God's Affection
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by emystar on
Monday, 9th January 2006 @ 07:17:42 AM AEST
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Very sad but well penned.
huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: God's Affection
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by GurlyTye on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 12:28:31 PM AEST
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| This is So full of painfull emotion.....in a heartbreaking way it is truly beautiful |
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Re: God's Affection
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 31st May 2007 @ 05:37:39 PM AEST
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i saved the best for last silly.
and i still love it sweetums. |
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