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Shadow Children
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 10:10:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Up and down in Shadow Town
the Shadow Children go..
In every street you're sure to
see them running to and fro.
They move around without a sound..
they're playing Hide and Seek..
but no one yet that I have met
has ever heard them speak.
Beneath the trees you often see
them dancing in and out..
and in the sun there's always one
to follow you about.
Go where you will..
they'll follow still
or sometimes run before,
where home at last they're standing fast
beside you at the door.
A faithful friend is they who'll lend
their presence everywhere...
Put out the light for bed at night,
your shadow's always there
Collected all, the shadows fall
across your face to keep
their shadow pact to make it black
and fill your eyes with sleep.
M.O.H.
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Man_On_High
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 10:19:21 PM AEST
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What an absolutely adorable write!!
I enjoyed this very much....Thank you.
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 11:33:53 PM AEST
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I agree with Jenni
it is an adorable write.well done. |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 12:18:35 AM AEST
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awesome write bro..love the concept.
as always, very well done.
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Re: Shadow Children
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 12:50:54 AM AEST
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Billy, this is exceptional. I truly enjoyed it. I would like copy it and email to my grandsons if you don't mind. The 5 year old would really enjoy it.
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Re: Shadow Children
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by CarolinaBlue on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 03:35:57 AM AEST
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What a refreshing and delightful
write Billy. well done
~Blue~ |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by brew on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 09:14:28 AM AEST
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Hmmm , really differ. Shadows...something that can follow, you all the time. Some could read into this one, like of a differ thinking. great post. Always like reading your work.
Brew~ |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 09:14:59 AM AEST
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This is gotta be a most fascinating poem i could see these kids running about, in fact itreminded of a scene from star trek with these taking over the town, as i read it the whole scenario was playing out before my eyes, i like the rhythum to it very nice poetry bill . . .
Ben |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by gwenevere on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 05:37:48 PM AEST
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| I enjoyed this immensley(?) A magical write.Inspired, ros |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 10:19:59 PM AEST
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Awww I love this one! What a wonderful story...I really like the way you wrote this. It had a great staccato flow to it, which in my opinion really made this the awesome write it is...Well done Billy, and what a superb bedtime tale this would make!
Scorp. |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by nanb294eva on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 03:37:14 PM AEST
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your poems belong in a book on a coffe table
nancy |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by emystar on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 08:18:05 PM AEST
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Good write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 08:36:16 PM AEST
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Billy you never cease to amaze me. What an awesome bedtime story this would make. Such talent you display so that we may all enjoy. Always written to perfection dearest Billy. Well done.
Hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:05:34 AM AEST
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Shadow Children.... what a fabulous idea and how wonderfully you've expressed it here! This is, I think, the best example of well crafted personification that I've seen in quite some time. I adore that you didn't just refer to them as children and leave the there with nothing to do! You truly brought them to life!
I honestly don't know if I'll ever see my own shadow the same way again. Maybe, I ought to give her a name.... : )
Excellent work!
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 10:19:47 AM AEST
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Wonderful piece and cleverly done.
I love thats its something from our every day lives and yet you have originally brought it into a new perspective.
Great flow and rhyme as well!
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Re: Shadow Children
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 12:27:23 AM AEST
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This piece is truly magical. A very unique sight that I'm glad I saw.
Take care.
David |
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