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FOREVER WITH YOU.
Contributed by
butterflygirl40
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Wednesday, 20th July 2005 @ 11:39:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Forever with you is such a dreamer.
Its like a dream.
I live darker days ... when I think of a park.
I would love to have a camper.
All I can do is think of forever .. but it makes me feel better when I think of forever with you.
You tell me that you are a bachelor.
And I tell you what a bomber.
Cause you are such a catcher .
You look like a Actor .
I walked 3 miles then I got a blister.
When I see you I want to run for cover.
But It makes me angry cause I cant have forever with you.
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 12:51:21 AM AEST
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when you read my poems !!! plz comment me on my poems okay!!!!!!!!!!!!!^_^ cause i have alot of people reading them but no comment ..
thanks butterflygirl40 |
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by Nightingale on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 03:44:27 AM AEST
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| Nice write.. Love is like a dream.. keep writing.. Looking forward to read more of ur poems ;) |
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by Nightingale on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 03:45:48 AM AEST
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| Nice write.. Love is like a dream.. keep writing.. Looking forward to read more of ur poems ;) |
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by Nightingale on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 03:58:50 AM AEST
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| Nice write.. Love is like a dream.. keep writing.. Looking forward to read more of ur poems ;) |
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by Archie on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 10:54:11 PM AEST
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Good write. The biggest thing I see in this poem is deception
"You look like an actor. . .When I see you I want to run for cover"
It is almost like the person showed one side of himself but when you saw who he really was you did not like it. He deceived you. That also makes this poem sad because it happens every day |
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 06:47:36 AM AEST
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I like the way you made this unfold and the contrast between making us first think you wanted to be with this person forever and then running for cover. Very well done.
Tim
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Re: FOREVER WITH YOU.
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by jmpy84 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 02:55:11 AM AEST
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| good job |
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