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Simon
Contributed by
little_genna
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Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 01:04:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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My real dad is dying,
Not seen him in years,
Why do I feel like crying,
He still causes tears.
The alcohol is killing him,
His body is slowly not functioning,
His life becoming dim,
I feel like Im the one choking
Not a word has passed between us in some time,
I pushed him away because of the addiction,
The years feel like a lifetime.
I became a distant person.
I am now a stranger to my father,
As is he a stranger to me,
Childhood memories with him are a blur,
For all this I feel guilty.
SJ
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little_genna
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2005-07-21 13:04:19]
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Re: Simon
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by Tricky on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 01:13:52 PM AEST
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| wow......I can't imagine what you must be going through. Your poem is beautiful and very sad. |
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Re: Simon
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 04:40:35 AM AEST
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| This was very difficult to read. I'm sure it's so unimaginably hard for you. Wonderful write. |
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Re: Simon
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by gmcse8 on
Tuesday, 10th October 2006 @ 08:30:47 AM AEST
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Hi Princess, I have been reading your poetry again lately; there is much I really enjoy about it. Some of them I get something else out of them each time I read them. I was not going to comment on this one, but decided to do so after some reflection. I had not read it before. I thought I was going to read something about your friend Simon and was looking forward to it, but surprise, wrong simon. I thought that technically it was one of your best. It flowed, it rhymed, it was coherant, and it was poignant. It was well written and I would be surprised if someone found fault with the technical aspects of it. The thing I liked most about it was the first and last line. They say it all. I would have liked to have seen this one written in a spiral. Do you know what I mean? It is the type of poem that would work visually that way. Anyway, it was very good.
Bob |
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