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Get Bent
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 06:03:48 PM in AEST
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Now dont get me wrong
I absolutely loved your poem
It sang with such a melodic flow
That the words you wrote sprung to life
A message that was passed from your time to mine
The way the stanzas coincide
A verb describes the adjective to its left side
The patterns that emerge
With each passing word
Paints a picture
Of what you would feel like from the inside
Projecting from your eyes
Are your desires
Your dreams
And all the lies
Sown in, in-between
Now dont misunderstand
I would recommend you use your left hand
Instead of two hands on the wheel
Let a limb loose to wave in the wind
To feel the rush
To get swept in
Encumbered by the thrust
Of a pelvic waist
A waste of trust
Spit in your face
I cherish the long letter you never wrote
The goodbye in an envelope
The stamp still wet
From the lick of your throat
Dont get me wrong
This isnt a joke
This is as real as my cancerous smoke
Here is the part when I say
I should get lost
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jyssvw22
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2005-07-21 18:03:48]
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Re: Get Bent
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by vibes2go on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 06:37:17 PM AEST
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| hmmm if it was meant to be nasty..I got that. |
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Re: Get Bent
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 08:07:36 PM AEST
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You GO jyss..
be as nasty as you WANNA be!!
(I wouldn't expect anything other than..)
Friggin' loved it from the first to last word..
I marvel at how, in all your work,
you marshal the ideas perfectly and with such great resolve..
an equisite piece on hate-
awesome-
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Re: Get Bent
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 11:08:22 PM AEST
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HATE - strong and clear, ringing like a huge bell. Not nice, but WTF? Nobody cares anymore, do they?
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Re: Get Bent
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:35:20 AM AEST
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LOL I don't know what to think or say about this one...Hmmm...one thing I was wondering...Is that person driving in England? If not it should be the right hand...lol Oddly enough, this write doesn't come across as hateful to me...unless maybe it's self directed...Seems more of a warning, to scare someone off, before they get too close...Who knows but you...lol...As far as content, it's full of your usual 'expressive' self ; )
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