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How She Felt
Contributed by
forgottenone_iam
on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 09:05:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Watery eyes
Turn to salty
Tears Streaming
Down Her Face.
She looks in
The mirror to
See a gurl
Who is broken
Inside.
Wanting out so
Bad, she doesnt
Know whta to
Do, whith these
Thoughts of hers.
Thoughts running so
Fast, she wants
To break something.
Puts out her
Hand smashes the
Mirror in froknt
Of her.
Shattered Glass and
There sits a
Broken Gurl.
Hurt by the
Pain that guy
Caused her.
What he put
her through was
HORRIBLE.
The Lies.
The Cheating.
How was she
Gonna ever love
Again in her
Life.
So scared every
Guy would be
HIM.
She sits there
All night Wondering
What she could
Have done different.
And there sits
A gurl with
Salty tears and
A broken heart.
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Re: How She Felt
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by SinginSilence on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 02:27:10 AM AEST
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| you know i'll have to take your word on this one, that girls actually do this. I'm sure they do. I've only ever known getting my heart broken, being a guy, i dont think i ever even broke a girl's heart, in my experience they sometimes don't even have hearts. What? oh the poem... it could have used a rhyme scheme at least. The imagery with the tears at the beginning was good, you should try incorporating some more sense invoking things in the other stanzas. Otherwise it's short concise to the point and i think that is what you intended. There are some spelling errors but you probably already realized that, i hope. Hmm...i guess all i have left to say is i'm sorry you ever had to feel heartbreak. Keep writing, does the soul good. |
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