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Ghost
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 11:51:37 AM in AEST
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Without you, Darling
I am but a ghost
A weeping spirit
left 'pon mortal seas
Abandoned and adrift
in angry waters
Crashing waves cry out
my woeful pleas
In their voice of thunder,
hear me calling
Feel me brush against you
in the gale
Stand within the rains
that are my teardrops
Falling, falling,
though to no avail
L. Carling c2005
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Rakerman1999
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Re: Ghost
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by Arden on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 12:40:19 PM AEST
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Stand within the rains
that are my teardrops
Falling, falling,
though to no avail
*sighs* oh how i am envious lol
Larry, this was simple and oh so beautiful.
Loved this, so smooth and just.....
5/5
-Rebekah |
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Re: Ghost
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by colinbaker62 on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 12:44:40 PM AEST
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This poem is rich with emotion,( with sadness or a sense of loss perhaps being the guiding thread ?) Even though I am a science and not an arts graduate, I still feel I get much from reading other's poems, and attempting to write my own short poems. Brother is it a refreshing break from essay writing !
Colin |
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Re: Ghost
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:06:38 PM AEST
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I think the use of metaphor here is incredible. In each stanza, is something new. I don't find that easy to do ... I tend to be so long winded that it is hard to complete so many thoughts in such short order. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Re: Ghost
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by justme03 on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:21:18 PM AEST
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this is beatifully worded and the image you created is awesome
props to yah man
luv Kortnie |
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Re: Ghost
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by gwenevere on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:36:22 PM AEST
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| A sad but effective write.The sea is wonderful for imagery.enjoyed this very much, Ros |
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Re: Ghost
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by gwenevere on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:37:13 PM AEST
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| A sad but effective write.The sea is wonderful for imagery.enjoyed this very much, Ros |
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Re: Ghost
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by gwenevere on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:37:13 PM AEST
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| A sad but effective write.The sea is wonderful for imagery.enjoyed this very much, Ros |
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Re: Ghost
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 01:48:34 PM AEST
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Good use of words, Casper...or is it Xavier, the Ghost!!
Love the images I got here.
Jenni
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Re: Ghost
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by vibes2go on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 04:06:23 PM AEST
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do you remember a long, long time ago ... I wrote a poem you really liked..you said it was titled Ghosts .. I said it was Shadows .. well I lost it .. and I never did know the title .. this reminded me .. so I thought since you liked it so much ..perhaps you saved it or something? I'd like to put it in my book .. or maybe it is just a ghost ..lol. I hate it when I lose writing .. I have sequels .. dang! nice write btw ... be seeing you~
mary ... |
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Re: Ghost
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 04:17:18 PM AEST
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Lovely work, Larry. You imagery is absolutely splendid. Leaves me with a sense of lonely aching.
Roses,
Rita |
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Re: Ghost
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 05:52:19 PM AEST
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Gosh, Larry.... this leave me aching. So many of your writes do that. I'm never sure if it's the words or the heart that you stuff into your poems - but, whichever... yeh... it gets me.
Always happy to stop by your page,
~Snem~ |
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Re: Ghost
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 08:37:43 PM AEST
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volumes spoken through a few short stanza's..
very very well written with the old world style
that I love so much..
terrifically poetic-
B |
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Re: Ghost
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by Kie on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 08:25:50 AM AEST
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I never hesitate to read your poems every time I see them. You amaze me with your way of standing out and writing something that engraves in my mind.
I loved this "Stand within the rains
that are my teardrops" and I wish my mind was as creative as yours!
High marks L.
Kie :)
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Re: Ghost
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 09:08:49 AM AEST
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Larry, This is a absolutely beautiful poem of love. The imagery is wonderful. There is such a soft tender loving and gentle quality to your poetry. The way you use the metaphor of the sea is so powerfull and gives the poem an emotional impact. Very poetic!
I really like this write, well done sir
Will |
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Re: Ghost
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by Spike on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 06:06:23 AM AEST
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A spare and emotional piece. You are very good at metaphorically merging and describing the theme and subject, and I'm glad I caught this one (like many others, it seems). Now who's the bugger who stuffed up your perfect score?
Spike |
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Re: Ghost
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 06:59:36 AM AEST
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In their voice of thunder,
hear me calling
Feel me brush against you
in the gale
Stand within the rains
that are my teardrops
Falling, falling,
though to no avail
Once again the man with the golden pen writes.
Beautiful words that grip the heart.
Mr rose man 100%
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: Ghost
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 08:20:29 AM AEST
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Poo i might cry. Larry this was just beautiful, your words are haunting and beautiful. I have no idea how you do it, but never stop ok.
Hugs,
Jane~ |
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Re: Ghost
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 01:24:03 AM AEST
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Wow what a sad write. I thought this was
marvellous and the imagery just filled my
heart with a terrible ache. No one should feel
like this and I hope you don't. Yeah this was
all so strongly and powerfully written.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Ghost
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 01:12:52 PM AEST
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I was hoping to see something new before I left. That's life ..I guess you're busy like the rest of us .. My muse has foresaken me too .. nothing but silly fluff lately .. in spite of what Ghosty thinks .. If you want to read me I'm at strlight and allpoetry .. be well and happy .. although with you, happiness doesn't seem to bring out your best writing .. well .. c-ya.
mary |
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Re: Ghost
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by waos on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:13:24 PM AEST
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Oh my word, gorgeous barely describes it, if it does. Wow, that
was gorgeous, sad, and definitely easy to relate to when remembering
the past. Awesome job!
~Kara |
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Re: Ghost
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by slogan on
Wednesday, 7th December 2005 @ 04:37:10 PM AEST
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| good job.. I really like the way you express yourself... great write...jh |
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