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Too Much Emotion
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 10:06:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Staring at the pen and paper,
I dont know how to make the words appear
They are all stuck in my head,
Taunting me while Im in bed,
Following me everywhere I go
Confusing me until I dont know
All my feeling of anger and pain,
The feeling of standing in cold rain,
All my emotions of madness
And all of complete sadness,
Stress and confusion,
The feeling of living an illusion
They are all too much to say
But they hurt me everyday
And I know others suffer too
I know that, for a fact, many do,
But I cant help feeling down,
I cant wipe off my frown
Ive been dragged to the ground
And there is no one around,
There is the feeling of being alone,
And the one of feeling on my own,
With no one to see, no one in sight,
The feeling that everything isnt all right
Feeling hurt and left behind,
The feeling of losing my mind,
Taking over my whole body,
The feeling of being nobody,
Taking over my heart, eating my soul,
Leaving me feeling very un-whole
The feeling of being under,
Making me want to surrender,
The pain of struggling in life,
Knowing that Im losing the strife,
Making me want to die
And say to all, goodbye
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sprinter27
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Re: Too Much Emotion
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 10:21:50 PM AEST
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| No matter what you do...don't give up...Don't surrender! I've been through some hard times...but somehow i have gotten through them. im having a hard time now...but i'm gonna get through it...and You are too! good luck with everything! |
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Re: Too Much Emotion
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 11:30:08 PM AEST
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That's it Sprints---a smile is in order! You need to stop writing these depressing writes with tragic endings: ( Did I make you smile? Good : )
All in all, I thought this was a very emotive piece, with relatable expression...some spots here and there the rhyming seemed a wee bit forced, but you kept a good flow and delivered some choice lines, such as;
"The feeling of being nobody
taking over my heart, eating my soul
Leaving me feeling very un-whole..."
Nicely done Sprints, and please cheer up: )
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Re: Too Much Emotion
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by veenu on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 09:40:30 AM AEST
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| once i felt in life while she cheat me the same u said but slowly i forgot but till they bring the pain |
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Re: Too Much Emotion
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by Phantom_X11 on
Sunday, 24th May 2009 @ 12:04:40 AM AEST
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What a way too express yourself... Nicely done... You just wrote how I feel and probably many other's... Great poem... 5tars ^_^*
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