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Prepare To die
Contributed by
kayden
on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 12:08:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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When I came home today
I saw her on the floor
I yelled and ran away
It hurt me to the core
When I came home today
I wanted to jump in her arms and say
I'll still love you after tomorrow
Now that love has turned to sorrow
Now pain is the only thing that will stay
She has taken happiness to the grave
Should I suffer the same fate
For my own head as the bait
Who cares if i die alone
She'll be mine next to my gravestone
When all I lived for was taken away
My oly purpose is to decay
For without you I will fade
Fade away to gun or blade
Time for good byes
All broken ties
All peace no distress
I am, eternally, at rest
Copyright ©
kayden
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2005-07-24 00:08:48]
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Re: Prepare To die
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by veenu on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 02:06:40 AM AEST
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| well dear i like ur poem i dont know why people not commenting well i found a wrong tradition here that the poet only comment to taht who comments there poem ur poem is nice needing more emotion |
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Re: Prepare To die
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by rockergirl94 on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 02:05:24 AM AEST
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Hm...well over all I liked it, I'll paste a couple of my favourite lines from it.
"Who cares if i die alone
She'll be mine next to my gravestone"
"For without you I will fade
Fade away to gun or blade"
Great use of repitition.
"I am, eternally, at rest"
I thought that made a great ending line. It really wrapped up the poem. |
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