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Change Up Your Mind
Contributed by
mangos
on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 01:57:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
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It is my contention
My choice my adjective
That fails to describe
A viable alternative
It is my ideas
That confuses this process
Which deludes this nonsense
And making it seem
More relevant than it really is
Who are those two faces
Who speak in unison
Lips moving
Like pattern of dissidence
Shattering the intense
Moment of clarity
Not so readily
Available
In times like these
It is my philosophy
That humanity has sunk
To a low
Repeating the same mistakes
Over and over again
Do we not learn
Pavlovian conditioning
A moment of reckoning
Not so readily
Available
In days like these
To whom
Does your voice belong
Do your arms work for
Do your legs run away from
Have you had your suspicions
From the start
From the part
I made unclear my contention
This was a curse
One minds version
A perspective
Now lost
__________
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Copyright ©
mangos
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2005-07-30 13:57:10]
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Re: Change Up Your Mind
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by truthhurts on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 04:29:23 PM AEST
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| that's really good..i can never write such poetry. makes me feel discouraged. |
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Re: Change Up Your Mind
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by Alibi on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:44:06 AM AEST
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| You speak with an eloquent tongue, and presented me with some thoughts to sit on. The style you write in is not very traditional, but pleasing to the eye just the same. I don't fully understand everything that's being said here in this poem, but it can be nice to be left wondering sometimes. Keep writing, you are talented and this was enjoyable to read! |
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Re: Change Up Your Mind
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 05:32:21 AM AEST
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I think I grasp the meaning behind this, but I could be wrong...It makes me think of someone being indecisive, and perhaps even a little questionable regarding their intents. Well, that's what I gathered from this write anyway! I like the way this is played out, and it reads with a calming, assured tone.
The expression is good in this, no doubt about it. Keep it up!
Scorp. |
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